Six Sentence – 6/3/12

Greetings fellow sixers! Happy Sunday! Here is the continuation of my last six. Cammy asks Ryan exactly what he would do to her, while Ryan wishes he could take back what he said. I’ve just reached 22,000 words, which might not seem a lot but it’s one step closer to being finished. Enjoy everyone!

“You’d what?” she repeated in firmer tone.

“Nuthin’,” Ryan swallowed, anticipating that she would merely let him off the hook.

“No! I know what you’d do…ain’t the first time a guy’s hit me.”

Ryan instantly looked up at her with bulging eyes. She maintained her straight, emotionless face, while he wished he could take back his harsh, impetuous words.

“That’s so not you Ryan…this isn’t you talkin’, but I get it, you’re pissed at me.”

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9 thoughts on “Six Sentence – 6/3/12

  1. Why do I get the feeling that hitting her wasn’t what he had in mind? Interesting six.

    • Interesting you say that…actually it was what he had in mind, I kinda cringed when I was writing it.

  2. I really like the feel of your dialogue. I’ve always thought the first 10,000 are the hardest, now that your at 20,000+ you’re well on your way to a completed manuscript.

  3. Interesting reveal of backstory, which you did deftly by pulling it into present dialogue! That’ll raise his protective instincts…

  4. Interesting that she can read him so well. Good work.

  5. He wanted to hit her? Makes me want to know why and in what context! Intriguing six, can’t wait to read more!

    • Thanks and good you mention why he’d want to hit her…you’d have to read the earlier part of the book to understand why.

  6. Rick is coming across as a very frustrated but inarticulate young man and it seems in character that he might feel like punching his way out of a stressful situation. And yes, it was brave of you to write it but it is GOOD.

  7. siobhanmuir

    Wow, she read him pretty well, didn’t she? I think he’s learning hard and fast that she might not be so easy to take on as he thought. Good six, Frank. 🙂

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