Six Sunday – six sentences, that’s all it takes to play. Thank you so much for visiting my site and for your comments. I hope you all had a wonderful Thanksgiving. This week, I’m sharing a six from a new chapter in my novel, which I’ve been working on for the past week. Ryan is meeting Cammy at her workplace, where they plan to spend an afternoon at the beach. She works in a surf shop, and when Ryan arrives he meets one of her co-workers. Hope you like it:
“Uh, yeah, I’m lookin’ for Cammy, I’m supposed to meet her here.”
The young man studied Ryan, folding his arms across his swelling chest. “The hell Cammy want wit yew?”
Ryan’s eyes widened as he took two steps forward. “Look pal, I don’t have time for games, you gonna tell me where she is or not?”
The young man winced, dragging his feet around the counter towards Ryan and sneered, “What if Ah don’t?”
Note: This is how the character talks, so bear that in mind if you’re wondering.
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ahh the male ego. Put two together and you have yourself a mess. I love that last question ‘What if I don’t’. It leaves so much room for opportunity! A great six.
Thanks for that, I thought the last line would be a good fit for Six Sunday.
Sounds like someone might be jealous. Nice six! 🙂
he is, but there’s a surprise that follows.
If he tells him, you’ve got a story.
If he doesn’t, you’ve got a better story.
Nice six!
he doesn’t tell him, but rather calls her over and insults him the process. It may not be the best story, but that’s how the story goes.
I love the way your character talks and the way you describe his mannerisms, dragging his feet etc. Great six!
Thanks, I thought hard about how he would talk and act, before I wrote it.
The other man seems pretty protective of Cammy. Or, is he jealous? Hmm… very curious! 🙂
Cammy later explains his personality to Ryan.
Wincing? Is something wrong with his feet or legs?
he’s wincing at Ryan, over what he’s said.
Ooh conflict! Cool.
Either he’s protective or jealous, but either way Ryan’s in for some fight. Nicely written six, Frank. 🙂
A little of both, I’ll share a follow up to this scene and we’ll see if they duke it out or not.
Sounds like Cammy will have to play peacemaker. I wonder if she will or make matters worse. Nice six. Love the dialogue.
Thanks Ryan, next week I’ll reveal how she handles them.
This character leaps off the page. Fabulous job!
thanks, an unexpected turn I know, but that’s how it’s supposed to be.