Six Sunday – 01/13/13

I can’t believe we only have three weeks of Six Sunday left. I really hope that we can find a way to keep it going after it officially ends; Sundays won’t be the same. Thanks for taking the time to read my six – it’s always appreciated. This week, we continue from my novel where Cammy has been telling Ryan about her abusive dad. In this six, she gives Ryan an example of what her dad did after she came home from a school dance. She speaks first:

 “Remember one time when I was fifteen, I came home from a dance after my date hooked up with some chick while we were on the dance floor. My dad was sittin’ on that damn couch, watchin’ some stupid game. I’m all in tears, and he turns to me givin’ me a funny look. After I told him what had happened, know what the fuck he said?”

Ryan slowly shrugged, giving her a dazed look.

“Said, ‘It’s whatcha get for dressin’ up like a whore, get used to it’,” she said, her voice breaking and her eyes welling up.

Next week, I will share one more piece of Cammy’s dad. It might be the worst of his treatment of her. Visit the Six Sunday link, for the complete list of many authors, like myself. Follow the action on Twitter  by searching #sixsunday

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25 thoughts on “Six Sunday – 01/13/13

  1. I like how you use both dialogue and description to put across their differing feelings. Cammy’s anger and Ryan’s bewilderment both come across very strongly in these sentences.

  2. Aw, poor girl. Parenting class might be a good idea for her horrible dad! Though it’s a bit late now. I can feel her emotion through your words.

  3. Jessica Subject

    Oh gosh! Yeah, not the type of father a young woman needs.

  4. Found your blog again…it took me a while! How is your writing going?

    • Glad you found me. My writing is going well, though I haven’t worked on my novel in a couple of weeks due to the holidays.

  5. What a horrible father! I don’t know if I can take any more! 🙂

    • Really? Well then you might want to brace yourself for one more piece of detail that I’ll share next week. Glad you’re feeling for Cammy though.

  6. Wow. This is powerful, Frank.The reader can feel the anguish and hurt, as well as the anger behind her words. Nicely done!

    • Thanks, I think it’s better to provide a specific example of what he did rather than just tell. And this is how she feels.

  7. I agree with Clare that your use of dialogue and description here is excellent in conveying their emotions. Absorbing story.

  8. Biological parents aren’t always good parents.

  9. You’ve done a wonderful job with Cammy’s dialogue. It has a nicely organic flow. You’re doing a great job with this story.

    • Thanks, I sometimes think that backstories stall the story but I feel that this is important for the reader to understand her character and behavior.

  10. siobhanmuir

    Damn, her dad needs an ice pick to the head. I can see why she’s less than thrilled about him. Good six, Frank.

  11. I know I said last week was heartbreaking (and I meant it) but THIS is heartbreaking. Ouch.

    • Well, there’s one more shocking thing she reveals about her dad. Interested to see if you’ll think THAT is heartbreaking. Either way, I’m glad you feel for her.

  12. Feel very sorry for Cammy having such a cold, cruel father.

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