Weekend Writing Warriors – 03/03/13

Hello and welcome to another week of Weekend Writing Warriors. Sorry I couldn’t participate last week, I missed you all though. This week I’m sharing more from my WIP novel. This week’s eight moves into the chapter after the diner setting with Ryan and Miguel. Enjoy!

Set-up: Cammy never showed up for dinner, nor replied to Ryan’s texts or calls. The next day, Ryan finally sees Cammy meditating in a yoga posture (one of her hobbies) in the middle of the student center on campus. He uneasily approaches her. We learn why she didn’t show up.

Still staring at her in awe, his phone hanging by his ear, Ryan shook his head and blinked rapidly to make sure he wasn’t dreaming. He let out a huge breath and shuffled toward her, his hands trembling. He knew she was into yoga, but wondered how she could focus with the constant chatter and the smacking of pool balls across the table. 

“C-Cammy?” He squeaked.

“’Sup stud,” she acknowledged, keeping her eyes shut.

“W-what h-happended last night? Where were you?”

“Got wasted,” she said as she slowly brought her hands to the center of her chest, pressing them together.

 

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27 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors – 03/03/13

  1. Well, if i was Ryan i wouldnt waste my time any more. Good excerpt, thank you. 😊

  2. I missed you last week, glad you’re back. I’ve been in his shoes and I can say, her excuse isn’t good enough, the only thing it would do is piss me off. From earlier snippets, I’m sure there’s more to her story. I’m curious to see how you handle it.

    • Her excuse isn’t good, but that’s her personality and part of the story plot – their relationship is difficult because of her antics.

  3. She’s either playing it cool or she really doesn’t care!

  4. Oh, somehow I wasn’t expecting that answer. If I was Ryan, I’d be mad…but somehow I have the feeling there’s more to be revealed. Excellent excerpt, keeps me wondering…

    • There is, but it doesn’t come out until the next chapter. I want the reader to react like you have – expect something totally unexpected. Hopefully it makes the reader want to continue reading. Glad you’ve been hooked.

  5. I agree, her excuse isn’t good enough. She doesn’t seem to care. I’m sure there’s more to her excuse than that though. Maybe she cares too much and it scares her. Does Ryan get tired of her antics?

    • There is more to her excuse and she reveals it in the next chapter. Ryan tries to push her for more info, but when it fails, he ignores her for the next two days. I’ll share how that goes down.

  6. Wasted = drunk?

    • yeah, it’s what most people her age refer it to. If I had written drunk, it wouldn’t sound like it was coming from a college kid.

  7. siobhanmuir

    Oh wow, so much pain and fear revealed in her last statement. Nicely done, Frank. 🙂

    • Yes, it’s a pain as a result of her abusive dad and the loss of her mother. Thanks for noticing!

  8. What?! That’s her reason for not showing? Run, Ryan, run!

  9. Maybe her attitude is a cover up for her real feelings.

  10. “pressing them together”
    Double intendre? I love’em!

  11. Nice contrast between her “zen” pose and her excuse. I wonder what she’s hiding?

    • She’s not hiding anything, she just feels like it’s no big deal. I reveal this later, but she’s not used to having people care about her.

  12. Carrie Crain

    She doesn’t mince words!

  13. Sad that she’s still having issues and that Ryan apparently still cares but is ready to move on. I like this story. Great snippet!

    • The issues carry on throught the story. Ryan does care because there’s something about her that makes him want to help her.

  14. OUCH. I hope there’s more to it than she’s initially letting on!

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