Hump Day Hook – 03/13/13

Good morning everyone! Sorry I missed the last two weeks, but I had to teach afternoons so it gave me little time to participate. This week I’m sharing a snippet from my YA short story WIP. My heroine, Sunny, has just encountered a battered young woman who asked her for spare change. Sunny feels sympathy for this woman offers to help her. This is in Sunny’s POV. Comments are greatly appreciated, and to those visiting my blog for the first time, I hope you like it.

She stared at the ground, her chin resting in the palms of her hands. I slowly shook my head, trying to tune out the vibrating rap music from a green sedan behind me. The lot gradually filled with more cars. Joe’s was a popular place in town and people would come at all hours of the day for a daily dose. This girl in front of me needed help, and I couldn’t walk away. There was something familiar about her, but I couldn’t remember where or if I’d even seen her. I had to get her away from here. To get her some shelter and find out what had happened to her. She looked up at me again with an arched brow.

“Shouldn’t you be on your way to a pool party or somethin’ kid?”

“C’mon,” I offered extending my hand. She gave me a look, but I wouldn’t back away. “Take my hand,” I urged. “You look like you could do with some grub, and some shelter.”


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17 thoughts on “Hump Day Hook – 03/13/13

  1. Oh, i really would like to know more about these two… Nice hook x

  2. Intriguing…and what a nice guy. Great hook. 😉

  3. Great hook, well done!

  4. C.R. Moss

    good description. felt as if i were there. thanks for sharing! 🙂

  5. Wow, I get how Sunny feels at seeing the hardship of the woman, and I also imagine how the woman must feel to see someone standing before her that she could have been if only… Want more! Well done.

  6. Makes me wonder what this woman has been through. And Sunny seems like a nice person, but is she getting in over her head? Nice hook. Can’t wait to read more!

    • All that is unravelled later in the story. You’ll find out later if she’s making a mistake or not.

  7. Kathleen Grieve

    Really like this young girl’s courage!

  8. A very sweet thing for your character to do. Well done.

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