Welcome to another day of Weekend Writing Warriors . I hope you’re all having a fabulous Labor Day weekend. I’m continuing to share an eight from Barbecued, my suspense short story. Before I share, I want to thank everyone for their helpful comments last week. This is a first draft, and I kind of wrote in a hurry. It’s my second story writing in first person, but I revise it. We we continue from last week’s snippet where Ashley and Melissa are awaiting their fate from their captor, Emily. Little do they know that things are about to get hot for them. Emily is the first to speak. Here’s the eight:
“Lucy, switch the floor on for mommy,” she said to her daughter on her right. Looking through the skylight, her daughter made a soft grin at us as I kept watch. She leaned over, disappearing from sight and I heard a loud click from above. Instantly, I dipped my head down at the floor, my eyes bulging as it began to glow red with intense heat under my bare feet. The floor continued to glow brighter as Ashley looked down and jerked her feet, feeling the mounting heat burn underfoot. With a blanket of red beneath us, we gaped at each other in horror as the heat became excruciating.
“Aaaah!!” Ashley cried, as we jumped off the blazing surface and forced to leap wildly in the empty room. The blistering floor was like fire on my feet with every touch as I cried out.
Yikes! What a way to be tortured! I always value your comments. Click on the link above for the official list of participating authors. Have a wonderful weekend!