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Melissa and Ashley have just been deposited into a strange room by a revolving couch. I’m skipping ahead in the scene to the part where the girls get to their feet and try to make sense of where they are. I shared this excerpt months ago, but as you will see it has been edited. This is in Melissa’s POV.
On with the eight:
Pushing my hair away from my face, I gazed at the suffocating, steel walls that completely surrounded us. I looked down at the icy metallic floor under my feet, puzzled by its honeycomb pattern that blanketed the entire room. Something about this floor caused a chill to gush down my back. Ashley rubbed her arms as if she had just come out of a freezer, but I knew it wasn’t because of the chilly air.
“Mel, t-t-tell me you got your cell phone with you?” My stomach clenched when I saw the terror in her innocent eyes.
“I don’t…it’s in my room,” I conceded. The color instantly drained from her face as she clutched her tank top.
Scary, no? Some of you probably recall that floor (hope you weren’t cringing too much!) I’d love to know what you think, keep in mind that this a first draft. I’ll continue with this next week. The next snippets I share have been posted before, but they have been redone and would like to know what you think. I would like to thank everyone for your helpful critiques last week – that’s the kind of help I need.
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