Are you a published/unpublished writer? Have a writing piece you want to share? Want to meet other writers? Then come to Weekend Writing Warriors! Thanks for stopping by. Here’s another eight from The Burning Night. We continue from my last eight, though I’m skipping a few lines in the scene because I can only participate in a few more rounds of W.W.W. (May is going to be a busy month for me!)
Set-up: Melissa and Ashley have been trapped in an empty room, and find out they’re not alone; three women watching down on them from a skylight in the ceiling suddenly greet them. Emily, a middle-aged woman and her twenty-something daughters, Ally and Jessie. These women have been watching the girls using hidden cameras in the house, and intend to torment them (Emily actually owns the house). The women are taunting Melissa when Ashley suddenly snaps at them. She’s the first to speak.
On with the eight:
“Look you cows, I dunno what your deal is, but don’t you mess with my sister or I’ll kick your ass! So back off and let us outta here, got it!”
My mouth hung open in awe, as I stared at the tight, wolf-like expression on my little sister that earned us a trio of sneers from the women. With a mild frown and casual tone, Emily replied, “Respect your elders, young lady…and you’re not goin’ anywhere.”
She rubbed her palms and her face turned into a spongy evil grin like the witch from the Wizard of Oz. “Melissa and Ashley…your time has come!”
I trembled and cringed, the hair lifting on my arms while Ashley grimaced, her shaky hands hanging by her hips. With a chilly voice, Emily declared, “Prepare yourselves for a monstrous hot foot!”
A hot foot? I’d be cringing if I were the teens. Next week you will see what happens. Why does she torment them and how does she know her names? Let’s just say Melissa and Ashley’s father helped send Emily’s husband to twenty years in prison (this is how she knew the girls’ names). I’ll share snippets which reveal how she knows so much about them later on down the road.
I’d love your feedback and look forward to reading your snippets. I would like to thank everyone for their helpful critiques last week, and I think my story is going to be more powerful as a result. (I am still a newbie writer though!)
I’m also participating on Facebook’s Snippet Sunday.
Have a great Sunday!