Another weekend and another edition of Weekend Writing Warriors. I’m so glad you’ve stopped by to check out my snippet. I hope you will visit other participants’ websites and view theirs. Just click on the link. I’m continuing from last week’s snippet from The Burning Night. No skipping this time, we pick up right from where we left off.
Set-up: After Ashley snaps at Melissa, she begins to break down as Ashley consoles her. This is in Melissa’s POV.
The eight (with a little creative punctuation):
I stared at the carpet as tears welled up in my eyes – a teenager could only take so much. The combination of fright, worry, not to mention the pain in my arm overwhelmed me as tears cascaded down my cheek.
“I’m not makin’ this up,” I said tearfully. “I swear, you’re w-worse than Dad…wh-why don’t you believe me?”
I sniffled as Ashley’s pale feet suddenly appeared in front of me. Looking up, I saw a sad smile on her face as teardrops dripped from my chin and splattered onto the carpet. She knelt down, scooted beside me and pulled my face against her shoulder.
“I’m sorry, Mel, I didn’t mean to hurt your feelings.”
With everything that’s happened, you can’t blame Melissa for breaking down. It almost made me cry as I wrote it. And things only get worse for these kids. I’d love to know what you think. I’ll be out hiking most of the day, so I won’t get to reading snippets until later this evening. If I don’t get to yours, I’m not snubbing you.
I will be away next weekend as I’m going to Chicago for a weekend getaway. I’ll continue this scene the following weekend. Take care and thanks for stopping by!