Good morning/afternoon everyone and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. I hope you all had a great Halloween (hopefully your kids didn’t overdo it on the candy). I’m offering an another eight from, The Burning Night. I’m skipping ahead to a scene, which I actually shared this months ago. I’ve edited it and want to get some feedback.
Set-up: Melissa and her sister, Ashley, are sitting on a couch in the basement of their rented country house. The couch spins them around, dumping them into a strange room where they are surrounded by steel walls. Melissa studies the room, while the atmosphere overwhelms Ashley.
Pushing my hair away from my face, I placed one hand on the wall behind us as chill blades instantly greeted my fingers. Waves of icy air rose from the floor and seeped through the bottoms of my feet. I glanced at the ink black surface underfoot, and wondered why it was so cold. Ashley rubbed her arms, like she had just come out of a freezer, and curled her toes. The vivid fear glittering in her eyes made me quiver.
“Are you cold?” I asked. Turning to me, she shook her head.
“I-it’s not that, I’m…f-f-freakin’ out here, Mel.”
I’d be freaking out, too. Things get worse from here, as many of you already know. I’ll share a few more from this story, and then share snippets from my novel. I apologize if anyone is tired of this, but I have attracted new fans who are eager to learn more about my story. Click on the link above for the official list of participating authors.
I’d like to say a shout out to Neva Squires-Rodriquez, if you happen to visit my site today: I had a great time in Chicago – the weather was beautiful and the city was amazing!