Looking for some relief from all the stress of the holiday season? Come by Weekend Writing Warriors to read some snippets from a variety of talented authors. It doesn’t quite feel like Christmas for me. Probably because I’ve been holed up in the library studying for finals. My thoughts go out to those affected by the rough weather in California recently.
I’m offering a snippet from The Burning Night. This pick up from the last sentence: “Sandy, switch it on!”
Set-up: Emily proceeds to torture Melissa and Ashley. She has her daughter, Sandra, flip on a power switch, which is connected to the floor beneath the Melissa and Ashley’s feet. They watch in horror as the floor turns into a giant stove. This is all in Melissa’s POV. Creative punctuation has been used to fit the 8 sentence rule.
Sandra leaned over the edge of the skylight, and a loud ‘click-click’ quickly followed. Dipping my chin, my eyes bulged as the floor began to glow red with heat nibbling the bottoms of my feet.
“Oh my God, the floor,” Ashley cried, as she looked down at her feet. The floor morphed into a blanket of red with mounting heat biting my feet, as I jerked them back and yelped, “Ah, it’s getting hot!”
Every inch of the floor glowed like an infrared cooktop on high, the glow catching our pajama pants, and the heat mounted to the point of scorching our feet.
“Aaaaahh!!” we cried as we leapt off the floor, endlessly lifting up one foot after the other in a lame attempt to avoid burns.
“Ah, ouch, ow, ow, aaoow,” I screeched, the intense heat stabbed the bottoms of my feet, like hundreds of needles.
“Ow, ow, ouch, ow, ouch,” Ashley cried, while hopping around like crazy.
Emily wasn’t kidding about that whole “hot foot to wipe out all hot feet” bit. The image, which I took myself, shows what the floor would look like (minus the black spots). The floor isn’t quite the shape of what it is in the picture. You get the idea, I’m sure. I had to omit some exclamation marks to fit the sentence limit. Anyway, what a horrible situation for those girls! They’ve got to find a way out of there, or at least cool that floor down before their feet are severely burned. More from this next week.
I’d love to know your thoughts, as they help me with the editing process. Thanks for stopping by.
I have one final exam to prep for, and then I’ll be officially done my first semester of grad school. I feel good about how far I’ve come. Too bad school has slowed my writing progress down. Once my exam is done, I have a 14-hour drive to Florida ahead of me, where I’ll be spending the holidays.
Have a great day!