Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Tickle Torture


For a fun way to sample stories in 8 sentences, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. You’ll find the official list of participating authors like me. Apparently, I forgot to sign up, so don’t be alarmed if you don’t see my name on the list. With the week I’ve had, I see why that happened. The semester is officially over for me. No final exams – yay!!

Thank you for commenting on my snippet from Let Go last week. Today I’d like to take a break from Let Go and offer an eight from The Burning Night, my YA horror novella. I originally said I wouldn’t be sharing more from it, but I’ve been editing it and I just had to share a few snippets.

This is the nicer side of the story, where we find my main characters, Melissa and Ashley, hanging out in Melissa’s bedroom of the house their parents have rented for a few days. Melissa and Ashley are teenage sisters. After a little bit of serious talk, Ashley lets out her “playful” side by tickling Melissa’s feet. This is in Melissa’s POV.

The eight:

Just as I rested my head on the pillow, Ashley sprung on the bed and sat on my legs.

“Hey, get off me,” I sat up and shoved her. “What the hell are you doin’?”

With a playful sneer, she took one look at my feet, wiggled her fingers and my heart started sprinting.

“No, not again, Ash, please don’t tickle them!”

With a nod and a giggle, she reached for my feet with one hand.

“Ashley, no-aaaaahhh!”

Her fingers trailed rapidly along the bottoms of my feet as I squealed and laughed spasmodically.

Ah, sweet sisterly love! Ashley is such a rascal. She does stuff like this to her sister all the time. And Melissa is very ticklish. It’s kind of a subplot to the story. The tickle torture will continue, though I’m not sure if I’ll be participating next week as I’ll be away in San Francisco for a few days. I’ll participate the following week if that’s the case.

I’d love your thoughts on this one. I will return to Let Go soon. I hope the weather is nice in your parts, and have a great Sunday!

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14 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Tickle Torture

  1. Enjoy San Francisco! This scene paints such a lovely picture of playful sisterhood. Well done!

  2. It’s nice to see a bit from this story; it’s been a while! Man, I hate being tickled, especially on my feet. Bratty sis! 🙂

  3. I was really ticklish as a child, and I loathed being tickled. People got kicked in the face over it. o_O

  4. I never had a sister, but I do this to my daughters all the time. The one form of torture I indulge in. LOL The weather’s wonderful here, but I’m inside writing so it might as well be raining. 🙂

  5. Awww so sweet. Love this snippet.

  6. That might be one of the worst “nice tortures” that can be inflicted. lol. Sweet scene between siblings, Frank. Well written! 🙂

    Enjoy SanFran!

  7. Hahaha! I used to do that sort of thing to my little sister all the time when she was a kid. Cute scene!

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