For a sampling of snippets from many fine authors, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. I remembered to sign up this time. Happy Mother’s Day to everyone and I hope you get plenty of fawning from loved ones! I’d like to send a shout-out to my own mother, who truly has the endurance of a fighter. She’s taught me never to give up and not to “play ball” with those that are up to no good.
I’m continuing to share a snippet from The Burning Night.
This picks up from the last eight where Ashley has pinned her sister, Melissa, down on her bed and is tickling her feet. Melissa’s feet are extremely ticklish. Ashley takes full pleasure in making her sister suffer, and naturally doesn’t give in to her pleas. This is Melissa’s POV and she speaks first. The snippet is in the new 8-10 sentence rule.
“S-s-stop you du-dumbass, it-it’s pure torture!”
Ashley’s fingers were like the bristles of a spinning power brush. I tried to punch her, but the tickling jolted every nerve in my body like an electric shock. She laughed as she tickled one foot then the other, sending me into another storm of squealing and laughter. Then her fingers hit the most ticklish spots – the area just below the balls of my feet.
“A-ashley, s-seriously! I-I-I’m gonna pa-pass out!”
I pounded the comforter repeatedly, hoping she’d take that as my way of saying, “Uncle”. My ribs started to ache from constant squirming and uncontrollable laughing.
Oh that Ashley. Poor Melissa. How much more can she take? This is nothing compared to what happens to her feet later in the story (wink, wink). This shows the relationship between the sisters, and I think it’s kinda cute. I look forward to reading your snippets today.
I needed some advice, if any of you have expertise on this. I want to self publish a poetry collection, but I’m not sure if I should have them professionally edited. Any thoughts on this?
Have a great Sunday!