Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Father Knows Best…Not!

This is the 8-10 sentence blog hop, Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the list of participators and rules for participation. I’m so glad you’ve stopped by to read my snippet.

I’m offering another excerpt from Never Let Go. We shift away from Ashley teasing Melissa to another theme of the story: father-daughter relationship.

In this scene, Melissa, Ashley and their parents are having their first meal at the country home where they’re staying. Ashley’s mother admires her daughter’s leather bracelet, which is a gift from her new boyfriend. When Ashley tries to get her dad to admire it, he offers a different point of view. The narration is in Melissa’s POV:

Dad glazed over the bracelet and offered a half-hearted shrug. “It would be more beautiful it came from someone with more class and manners.”

“Kevin,” my mom snapped as Ashley’s face instantly fell.

“Daddy, how can you say that?”

“You know how I feel about that boy,” he reached for another slice of garlic bread. “It’s obvious those green eyes and brown curls have you under his spell, but I know a simpleton when I see one. If you wish to find out the hard way, like your sister did with Chris, you are more than welcome.”    

“That’s not fair, Dad, you don’t know Steve at all, he-”

“It’s a beautiful bracelet,” I jumped in, narrowing my eyes at Dad. “And Steve’s so much better than Chris, he treats Ashley like a princess and makes her happy, so that’s all that matters.”


Well kudos to Melissa for standing up for her little sister. I think this snippet coincides perfectly with it being Father’s Day and all. Later in the story, you discover that Dad was right all along. I’m sorry that I didn’t get around to visiting everyone’s posts last week. It’s been kind of hectic with Euro 2016 going on. I’ll do my best to read and comment today. Thanks in advance for all your feedback!

Happy Father’s Day to all the fathers out there, especially my own dad who has been the best dad a child could have in my opinion.


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19 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Father Knows Best…Not!

  1. Some solidarity between the sisters — good to see. As for Dad, not a good role model for Father’s Day.
    Typ0: “Daddy, how CAN you say that?”

  2. Happy Father’s Day, Frank.

    How like a father to cut to the chase. My Dad never gave me any opiinion

    • Sorry – pressed backspace and it sent the above, typo and all. My Dad never actually shared his opinion of any of the men in my life… Something I never noticed until now. Thanks for the post. The dialogue is so easy flowing and natural.

      • The father is one of those people that instantly sees trouble in people, and really wants his girls to be treated right.

  3. Well, fathers can be protective of their little girls, but he could be more diplomatic. Nice to see Melissa stepping in, even though Ashley can be a pain.

  4. I like the family feeling of this conversation, and the way they’re all interacting. Very realistic. Great snippet!

  5. Glad the sisters stand up for each other. As for the dad butting in, I guess it’s normal. (Can’t really say, mine never cared much). Great snippet! Are you supporting Spain in the Eurocup? 😉

    • Glad you felt the poignancy in the snippet. I’m sorry about your dad not caring. I know a few people with similar situations with their dads. And yes, I’m supporting both Spain and Ireland in the euros, though it looks like the Irish are going out.

  6. Manners are good, less sure about class–the word can be used in a way that’s more snobby than true. But I wonder how many dads like their daughter’s dates, regardless!

    • I think i need to use a different word. Class doesn’t sound right now that you mention it. I’d be the same if it were my daughter.

  7. She jumps in to stand up for her sister, but still cuts her off! Lol. Would a Dad really focus on looks when he’s talking down about a potential boyfriend?

    • He thinks she’s smitten with looks, but he’s looking more at what’s inside. As for Melissa, she wants to prevent an argument between Ashley and Dad and support her sister.

  8. Well, that didn’t go as planned, but I’m glad she defended her sister, given their rivalry. 🙂

  9. Andrea R Huelsenbeck

    I’m confused by the second word. Did you mean “gazed”? Or maybe “Dad’s eyes glazed over as he looked at the bracelet”?
    “Simpleton” is such an old-fashioned word. Everything else feels so contemporary. Maybe “idiot”?

    • I meant “glazed over the bracelet.” He’s looking at it with disinterest. The father is old-fashioned so he would choose a word such as this.

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