Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the 8-10 sentence blog hop where you sample excerpts of great stories. Sorry I was absent last weekend. I have an important decision to make in the next week or so – one that will alter the course of my life – so I’ve been preoccupied with that of late. Despite this, I’ve decided to participate today, so thanks for visiting!
I’m sharing a snippet from My Gift, which is a YA contemporary WIP that I recently started. It actually is the opening sentences from the story, where my MC, Stephanie, is being attacked by her abusive boyfriend, and this is her POV:
“You stupid bitch,” Adam slurs as he rams his foot into my ribs.
Pain shoots into my stomach with more intensity than the previous blows. All I can do is cry out in agony while uselessly trying to block my boyfriend’s foot.
“A-adam, ple-please stop! I-I’m sorry!”
“Shut up,” he kicks me, sending a storm of pain into my hands that block my stomach.
His eyes are filled with drunken rage, and it’s clear he won’t let me up.
“You were with that fuggin’ guy,” he bellows, “weren’t ya!”
Whatever he was drinking before I walked in the door makes his voice sound less violent, but it offers no respite from the blows he’s delivering to my body.
The Blurb: All it took was a stroke of luck for Stephanie Deigel to free herself from the clutches of abusive boyfriend, Adam, and make her miraculous escape. In doing so, she meets Ben. A goodhearted Christian who generously takes her into his home when she has nowhere else to go. It’s the perfect opportunity to rebuild her life that’s been reduced to ruins. A quaint home in a peaceful town, miles from the monster who promised to always take care of her, and under Ben’s generous hospitality. But Stephanie quickly learns that rebuilding is tough, especially as she dropped out of college and has limited funds in her bank account. On top of that, Ben’s feisty teenage daughter doesn’t appreciate the new guest in the house. Stephanie knows she can’t stay where she is forever. She also knows it’s only a matter of time before Adam finally catches up to her. Will she be able to put her life back together before time runs out?
Not sure if this is the right way to open the story. Again, I just started it. Feedback is always appreciated. I will be out and about today, so I probably won’t get to reading everyone’s snippets until the evening.