Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – It Will Be Quite Painful

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks for visiting my blog today! And ‘howdy!’ to all of my fellow writer friends! I’ve missed you all! Though, I guess I’ve been saying that a lot this year.

I’m offering an excerpt from my YA contemporary, Never Let Go. My MC’s Melissa and Ashley (a pair of teenage sisters) have found themselves trapped in a steel walled box room. They are greeted by woman and her two young adult daughters, who are watching them through a skylight. The woman, Emily, tells Melissa and Ashley that she intends to seek vengeance on the girls’ father whom wrong her awhile. Melissa wants to know why, of course.

The snippet, which has been formatted to meet the sentence requirement, opens with Emily speaking to Melissa. This is in Melissa’s POV.

“Because it’s better to attack a man’s heart, my dear, the ones he cares about the most…like his two daughters.”

I let out a gasp, and an uncomfortable feeling suddenly seared in my stomach.

“What a shame,” Emily said with a drowsy voice as she leaned forward to the point where her nose was almost touching the glass. “Such beautiful, healthy girls Kevin has…and now I have to do this to them.”

It became instantly clear that Emily wasn’t just imprisoning us. I swallowed the iron lump in my throat while tremors rumbled in my hands, racing throughout my bloodstream.

“Wh-what are you g-gonna do to us?”

“Oh but that would ruin the surprise, my sweet little Melissa. But don’t worry, it will be quite painful, I assure you.”

My eyes instantly grew wide and traveled across every inch of the seemingly empty room, while chills shot up and down my spine.

 

Some of you will recall previous snippets from this story, hence you know Emily isn’t joking about it being painful – and it will be indeed! Either way, what a scary situation for the hapless teens. More from this in the next edition of Weekend Writing Warriors. Your feedback is much appreciated!

I will be out of town next weekend, so the next posting will occur the weekend after. I hope to become a regular participant after what’s been my longest absence. I was just following up with that big decision I told you about. I finally made it, which meant I decided not to pursue a PhD. and return home to southern Ontario Canada. I’m glad I made this choice, even though it was one of the biggest ones I had to make. I’ll post a story about it on my blog soon.

Thanks for reading, and be sure to click on the link to Weekend Writing Warriors to read other snippets from fine authors.

Frank

 

 

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18 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – It Will Be Quite Painful

  1. This week I watched the movie “Room”, so this description comes with a raft of ready made emotions for me.

  2. And we’re back to this intriguing story! Interesting to learn she has a revenge motivation….

  3. Poor girls! 😦

  4. EEK! It’s awful to know what’s coming. You did a great job describing her emotions here.

  5. Oh – what Emily said at the end – is something nobody wants hear.
    Scary and fascinating.
    Tweeted.

  6. Ah, right in time for Halloween! eeeeeek! Great snippet!

  7. I have never liked the bad guys who punish someone’s loved ones, but I do have to admit it’s practical. You can hurt someone so much more that way…

  8. Diane Burton

    Yikes! Those poor girls. Great showing of emotion.

  9. Eeek, I would not want to be in their situation. Great writing!

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