Weekend Writing Warriors – “Thanks for Nothin’!”



The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors. Thank you everyone for your helpful comments last week. I would like to especially thank, Veronica Scott, for her informative feedback – thanks Veronica!

Continuing today with my YA WIP, Cruel Summer, I’ve skipped a few lines in this week’s snippet. Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car to take her sister out for late night waffles. Dad wouldn’t oblige on the count of a speeding ticket she got, which happened before the story began. Melissa and her dad argue, but to no avail Melissa loses. Feeling this is unfair, she let’s her feelings be known:

“Good talkin’ to ya, Dad,” I said, throwing up my hands, “thanks for nothin’!”

I spun on my heels and left his study.

“Melissa Lauren Isabel McNamara, get back here at once,” Dad retorted coldly as I was passing our pool table, his voice stinging my back like needles.

I dragged my feet towards him, the crimson burning in his eyes made my heart shudder as he stood up from his leather office chair.

“I understand your feelings of resentment because you didn’t get your way,” he said sternly. “But I have worked very hard to provide for you and your sister, ever since the day your mother’s life was taken from us, so I suggest you not channel that misguided teenage immaturity in the form of a thoughtless insult.”

 I gulped, wishing I had just left the room without mouthing back at him, but I kept my posture straight so he wouldn’t know he was getting to me.

Dad leaned forward, the anger in his eyes hitting me harder. “Thanks to me, you are fortunate to have a roof over your head and food to eat. There are countless children in this world, your age and younger, that live in such great poverty and abuse…you may wish to keep that in mind, young lady!”

Well Melissa, he kicked your butt! She should have followed her own advice indeed! Thoughts? Feedback?

Thank you for visiting my blog today, and I hope you will visit other authors participating today. I will be back to share more snippets in May, as I will be embarking on my month long voyage to South America next week! I’m very excited as I’ve never been and always wanted to go! I’m especially looking forward to Machu Picchu, Argentina and Chile!

Have a great weekend!


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18 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors – “Thanks for Nothin’!”

  1. Dad’s diatribe characterizes him, but her response says a lot about her, as well.

  2. Well said, Dad!

    Good job, Frank. Nothing like some home truths to settle things.

  3. jakerose

    This sounds strangely similar to a lesson I’ve had from my parents a few times before… yeah, she definitely should’ve just kept her mouth shut, but now she knows better!

  4. Author Jessica E. Subject

    And I feel like slinking out of the room. Felt very real on both ends for me. 🙂

  5. Well I enjoy your stories, glad the feedback was worth considering at least 🙂 As to today’s excerpt, yup, when the parent uses your full name, wow, are you in trouble – such a realistic note. Have a great trip, sounds like a wonderful set of experiences ahead.

    • Yes, hearing your full name from a parent means trouble, and yes I hope my trip brings about everlasting experiences!

  6. Well, Dad wins that round. Have a great time on your trip!

  7. kimmydonn

    All four names! That cannot be good. I don’t do it much to my daughter, but her father likes to call her by it.

  8. When you have children, you’re obligated to care for them to a minimum standard. But making them feel loved is important, too.

  9. Hopefully she thinks on his words… after she sulks, of course. 😉

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