Weekend Writing Warriors – Dirty Little Secrets

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Thanks for visiting! The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors.

Well, this is a record. I’m participating for the second consecutive week! I’m offering an excerpt from my new WIP, Do for Love (formerly Cruel Summer), a coming-of-age YA contemporary that takes place in Cincinnati.

This weeks’ snippet starts a few lines down from last week’s one. Melissa’s dad insists on meeting Ashley’s new beau. Fumed at her little sister for messing with her phone, Melissa threatens to tell her new boyfriend about her dirty little secrets.

The snippet begins as Melissa lists Ashley’s secrets. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit:

“Like how you never went out trick-or-treating on Halloween cuz the costumes freaked you out,” I tower over Ashley with folded arms.

“Oooh, big threat,” she paws the air.

“And how you used to wet your bed.”

Her brows fly up as she twists the hem of her pajama pants.

“And that you’re really, really ticklish.”

With both eyes bulging, she cringes in her chair as I reach for her feet, wiggling my fingers.

“Aaah, no, don’t”, she cries, leaping out of the chair like it suddenly became hot and burned her butt.

“May I remind you that you are also ticklish,” Dad cuts in, “a trait which you both apparently have inherited from your late mother.”

My mind instantly travels back to the days when Chris would pin me on the couch and tickle my feet relentlessly, while my dad and Ashley would delightfully watch me struggle and squeal.

“Damn it,” I utter under my breath.

 

Blurb: When her younger sister starts dating a young man with a dark side, life turns upside down for Melissa. She’ll need the help from the last person she would go to – her ex-boyfriend.

Looks like Melissa has got some secrets of her own! Guess she better hush if she knows what’s good for her!

Thank you in advanced for reading and providing constructive feedback!

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18 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors – Dirty Little Secrets

  1. If blackmail doesn’t work, I guess you can always try tickling.

  2. Author Jessica E. Subject

    I think telling secrets and showing old pictures is part of the initiation of bringing any new date home. LOL Nice snippet!

    • It sure is, but Melissa wants to use this as a way to get back at Ashley for pranking her so much!

  3. They each seem to know each other’s triggers all right. Interesting snippet!

  4. I never had the “joy” of siblings, but my two girls acted just like this. Great, realistic scene!

  5. Nice flashback. I think that Chris is about to reenter the picture. 🙂

  6. Ah, family weaknesses… 😉

  7. Ooh, these guys are brutal. I hate being tickled! Nice to see you again!

  8. nancygideon

    So realistic and visual! Very nice, Frank!!

  9. Ah, family… Isn’t this where you traditionally bring out embarrassing childhood photos?

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