Weekend Writing Warriors – Surprise Attack?

Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors Happy holidays everyone, or Wesołych Świat as they say here in Poland!

I’m very happy I finally found some time to participate today after all these months. I’m sharing a snippet from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Unfortunately, it’s not a holiday season read. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.

This snippet comes from the beginning of a new chapter, where my heroine, Melissa, comes home late one evening. She suddenly realizes her younger sister, Ashley, is home and thinks she’s going to jump out of nowhere and scare her (which she likes to do). And since their dad is out for the evening, Melissa doesn’t have anyone to help her. She sneaks through the living room, hoping to avoid a surprise attack. Creative editing has been used to meet the sentence limit.

         I tiptoe through the hall, keeping away from the hall closet, my eyes on searchlight mode for any signs of my sister lurking as I pass the dining room on my left. My heart goes wild and muscles tense in the process as I near the living room couch. The motor of the fridge hums peacefully in the kitchen, punctuating the uncomfortable silence.

         “Dad? Mel?” Ashley’s voice startles me as it sails from upstairs. “Is that you?”
          “Thank God,” I let out a sigh, “she can’t spook me.”

           It suddenly hits me I had nothing to worry about in the first place, since Ashley never leaves her room if she’s home by herself. For some reason, solitude in an empty house big enough for a family of five freaks her out, and the company of Troye Sivan and Taylor Swift posters, as well as blue décor and Spotify keep her from going insane until one of us comes home. She’s also got Mr. Whiffles, her stuffed teddy bear that our late mother gave to her when she was two, as a backup.

There isn’t a lot of action, but the reader learns a bit about Ashley. At least, there was no surprise attack.

Your feedback is most welcome and appreciated! Thanks for visiting my blog today, and be sure to visit other participating authors as well!

This will be my last participation on W.W.W. for 2018, as next week is my last week of teaching before the holidays. I’m off to Egypt next weekend to marvel at the pyramids and ancient temples during my break! Veronica Scott, you will likely be interested to hear this! I’ve always wanted to see Egypt as I’ve been fascinated with Ancient Egypt forever!

To my fellow author friends: I’ve been doing very well over the last few months, enjoying life in Poland, though the job can be very busy and stressful at times, hence why I haven’t participated. I take things one day at a time. All and all, it has been a great life-changing experience!

Happy Holidays everyone and Happy New Year! See you in 2019! Do widzenia!

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17 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors – Surprise Attack?

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    Yes, this is a very revealing snippet. Well done!

  2. Nice details. I liked the posters and the teddy bear — but mostly for what they tell us about the sister.

  3. Have a great time while in Egypt! Enjoyed the excerpt…I was thinking she might as well have let her sister surprise her, since she was getting so stressed about NOT getting surprised, but then the explanation about Ashley staying in her room when the house was empty was a good one!

    • Yes, the explanation about Ashley staying in her room when she’s alone fills in any gaps. I will be thinking about you when I’m Egypt seeing as many of your stories are set there.

  4. nancygideon

    What a great scene, morphing a fiendish attacker into an anxious girl taking comfort in her fortress of youth. Happy Holidays, Frank!!

  5. julieevelynjoyce

    You are quite the globetrotter, my friend! Glad you’ve had a memorable teaching experience in Poland, and I hope you have a wonderful time in Egypt! Keep up the great writing! 🙂

    • And the same to you! I see your book, Steeped in Love, got published! Well done! And yes, I am the globetrotter! It’s the greatest experience I could have! It’s been challenging teaching in Poland, but it pays off in the end.

  6. Diane Burton

    Enjoyed the snippet and what it says about her. So glad you’re enjoying your time in Poland. What a great opportunity to visit Egypt. Have fun and enjoy the holidays.

  7. Agreeing with you, we learn a lot about Ashley here!

  8. I’m with Ashley. Big empty houses are disturbing.
    Happy holidays!

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