Weekend Writing Warriors/Snippet Sunday – Borrowing Dad’s Car

This is the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. I’m also participating in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! I’m so glad to be back after a long hiatus. Hopefully, this will help with the COVID-19 blues.

I’m offering a snippet from my WIP, Driving Me Wild (formerly Love Conquers). This comes from the first chapter where heroine, Melissa, has asked her dad if she can borrow his car so she can drive her friends to a theme park. The snippet, which is in Melissa’s POV, begins with her dad’s reaction. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:

 

My dad’s brows shoot up. “I suggest you find an alternate payback method, young lady! My car is off limits, and that’s final!”
“Are you, like, still pissed about that?”
“You better believe it, Melissa Lauren Isabel! When you got your license, I asked you to obey the traffic laws as a condition of using my vehicle. And you went out and got a fifty-five-dollar speeding ticket!”
A couple of months ago, I was pulled over for speeding through a residential area while on my way to a pool party hosted by one of Cass’s friends.
“Dad, it wasn’t my fault, I-”
“You went ten miles over the speeding limit,” he reminds me with flaring nostrils.

 

I guess we know where this going. This dilemma is one of Melissa’s obstacles in the story. As this is the first draft, your thoughts and constructive feedback are most welcome and appreciated; they will aid during the editing stages.

The blurb can be found here.

 

In case everyone is wondering, I am doing fine despite the pandemic. Staying active, keeping mentally and physically fit the best I can, and catching up on writing. My thoughts go out to all feeling the COVID-19 blues, especially those facing total lockdown.

See you next time!

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26 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/Snippet Sunday – Borrowing Dad’s Car

  1. Welcome back, Frank. We’re doing fine here so far, though we sure wish our sons in Amsterdam were closer.

    Re: your snippet. I hope Melissa isn’t going to do something foolish.

    • Great to hear that you are doing well. Things do look grim in Europe. At least that’s what my friends in Spain, Italy and Poland say.

      Re: snippet. You’ll have to find out in the next snippet.

  2. Oh–dad is a tough love kind of parent. Melissa needs to toe the line to earn his trust again. (spoken as a mom who got three children through their teenage driving years.) lol

    Welcome back, Frank! It’s s good to see you again. Sounds like you have a good plan to get through the Covid blues. Be safe and take care. 🙂

    • Yes, she does. Dad is one of the obstacles in her path. And thanks. I’m just keeping a low profile since I’m off from both my jobs. Take care and stay safe, too!

  3. She just can’t get along with her Dad. Hi, my friend!

  4. Author Jessica E. Subject

    At this point, I don’t think she’s getting the car.

  5. Again, she is in big trouble. Let’s see what happens next.

  6. Aurora Springer

    Hi Frank.
    A typical teenager moment in your snippet.

  7. I hope she can come up with a Plan B, because it looks like Dad’s car is out of the question (not that I blame him).

    Good to see you again, Frank! Glad you are well and safe!

  8. Welcome back, very realistic dialog I thought. Not sure as a teenager I’d have noticed whether my Dad’s nostrils were flaring or not LOL. That detail kinda put me off (the fact she’s noticing). Maybe he could have another physical manifestation of his stress? Like a frown….anyway, nice to have a new snippet from you!

    • Thanks for the suggestion Veronica! I can definitely change the nostrils flaring bit. It makes sense after you pointed it out.

  9. I wouldn’t be too happy about the ticket either. 🙂

  10. Diane Burton

    Glad you’re back, Frank. She got away easy on a 10 mph over. I was 5 over and my ticket was $105. Ouch. Stay safe.

    • Well, it’s not the only thing she did. She also ran a stop sign. Thanks for sharing your bit with the law. I think I need to do more research on speeding tickets where my story takes place.

  11. Very real teenager / dad argument. Well done.
    My initial thought was, $55 is not much for a speeding ticket … LOL

  12. nancygideon

    Rules is Rules and the Law’s the Law . . . especially in the family car!

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