Weekend Writing Warriors/#SnippetSunday – Pesky Sister


Another week of the COVID-19 pandemic gone by! Now it’s time to get your snippet fixings from Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the official list of participating writers. You’ll also find me on Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog!

Continuing from my WIP, Driving Me Wild.  This snippet picks up from last week’s last line: “Ash, you lay one finger on me, and I’ll-”

Let’s see what Ashley does. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit.  Here we go!


She does a butt-drop on my legs, pinning them down, and then begins tickling my feet.

I explode into a storm of squealing and writhing.

“Who is he, Melissaaaa?”

I hammer her back with my fist as her fingernails relentlessly brush the bottoms of my feet, but she just ignores it. “S-s-stop, yo-you little brat, I-I-I’m gonna kill you!”

“I don’t think sooooo,” she flutes.

Every nerve ending in my feet goes wild like the crowd at Paul Brown after a Bengals touchdown, keeping me from getting her off.

I’m laughing so much that my lungs struggle to get oxygen. “I-I can’t bre-bre-breathe, le-le-lemmie go, you bitch!”

She giggles and tickles in between the balls and toes, sending me into a deeper gale of laughter and flailing as I repeatedly pound one of the throw pillows.


Oh that pesky Ashley, and poor Melissa! You may recall in a previous snippet that she mentioned how ticklish she is. And looks like she wasn’t kidding! How much longer can she hold out?

Your feedback is most welcome and appreciated. In return, I will snippets and offer comments. Have a great weekend!

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16 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/#SnippetSunday – Pesky Sister

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    I wonder who will be defeated first. Nice snippet!

  2. nancygideon

    Oh geez, I hate being tickled! This made me squirm. Nice job.

  3. Lots of vivid details!

  4. Yikes! The tickling put me on edge. lol Great scene!

  5. Oh man, being ticklish and then having someone tickle you can sometimes be the worst lol.

  6. Diane Burton

    You did such a good job my feet jerked in response. lol

  7. so true to the real thing. Well done. I can remember those moments with my sisters 🙂

  8. I think you did a great job of writing Melissa’s attempt to talk through laughter. It’s audible! 🙂

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