Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Need Rest

 

 

Hey yall! Time to get your snippet fixings from Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the official list of participating writers. You’ll also find me on Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog!

I’m sharing an excerpt from my WIP, Driving Me Wild.  Melissa is coming home from a morning of babysitting, and is in need of some rest before her big date with Logan.

The snippet begins where Melissa goes into detail about how her charge wanted to play tag and basketball – something she wished she had known arriving at said charge’s house.

Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit.  Here we go!

 

            It would have been nice to know this before I left home because then I would have worn sneakers instead of flip-flops. And basketball in flip-flops is a bad idea – a really bad idea! Eventually, I gave up and played it – as well as tag – barefoot, which wasn’t any better because my poor feet took a beating from the stones, dirt and who-knows-what-else I stepped on.

            I groan and grimace as I roll my bike into the garage. I ‘ow-ow-ow’ all the way into my house, which feels like a trek across a bed of red-hot coals.

            “Sup, sistah,” Ashley chimes with a beam on her face as I set my keys on the entryway table. She’s stretched out on the sofa, her legs resting on her boyfriend’s lap as he rubs her feet.

            He greets me with a wave.

            Kicking off my sandals, I salute them halfheartedly. “Gonna take a nap, do not disturb, got it?”

 

Poor Melissa! Unfortunately, Ashley won’t let her sleep peacefully. More on that next week. Your thoughts and feedback are, as always, most appreciated!

The weather is finally starting to look as it should, which means I can get some biking in between work-from-home and writing. I hope the weather is nice wherever you are, and that COVID measures are loosening up a little.

Enjoy your weekend!

 

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20 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Need Rest

  1. Maybe Ashley needs the boyfriend to give her foot massage.

  2. She’s in need of something!

  3. Author Jessica E. Subject

    By telling a sibling not to do something, it’s like encouragement for them to do it.

  4. I sympathize with her sore feet! Great snippet…

  5. nancygideon

    OwOwOw, indeed. Nothing like sore feet to kill any mood and she certainly is in one!

  6. Ow, ow, ow. This made my feet hurt just reading it! I like how you used “wo” as a verb. Really shows the scene!

  7. Ian Bott

    Ed beat me to the observation about a foot rub! And the “Ow, ow, ow” is perfectly apt.

    • Thanks for the observations. I thought the “ow ow” was appropriate, especially as Melissa is a teenager

  8. Nothing worse than aching feet!

  9. Diane Burton

    My feet hurt too, just reading that. Now what is her sister going to do to spoil things?

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