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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday -Here Comes Mom

This is the 8-10 sentence blog hop, Weekend Writing Warriors, the place to get your Sunday sampling of snippets from a smorgasbord of writers. Click on the link to see who’s participating.

Another snippet from Never Let Go, currently in the editing process. Last week I shared one where Melissa has just been pranked by her younger sister, Ashley, albeit spraying lemonade in her face. In this snippet, we’ll see how Melissa reacts:

            Anger simmered inside me as I finally managed to open one eye.  The lingering juice made my vision kind of blurry, but not enough where I couldn’t see the cocoon of joy wrapped on my sister’s face – the kind after success in tormenting me. “Ha-ha, I gotcha, I gotcha!”  

            “That’s it, you’re dead,” I grabbed a vase from a table, cranked it back as Ashley gasped and shielded herself with her arms.

            “Melissa Lauren McNamara don’t you dare,” my mother’s voice thundered in the air.

             Ashley and I froze as we watched her come down the stairs, my heart dashed from her clogs thumping on the wooden staircase. “Put it down this instant!”

            I set the vase down on the table, giving Ashley the coldest frown I could and wiping the sticky juice off my face and neck before it could drip onto my shirt.

            Ashley cringed with red cheeks under our mother’s disapproving glare. “And as for you…Ashley Joanne Elizabeth, spraying your sister with pop?”

 

Dang, Mom! Why’d you have to spoil the fun? You know a mother means business when she uses your full name. I sometimes wonder how I came up with my characters’ names. There is a reason why Ashley pranks Melissa, and it’s revealed near the end of the story, but I can’t give it away yet. Next week, I’ll share a snippet from a different scene.

As always, your feedback is most appreciated.

 

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Melissa Can’t Win

The first Weekend Writing Warriors of November is here. Click on the link to see how you can join us, or to see who else is participating today. I hope you all had a great Halloween, whether it was trick-or-treating with the kids, or a classic Halloween party. Time to look to Thanksgiving, Christmas and most of all NaNoWriMo. I’m offering a snippet from The Burning Night. This will be the last snippet I share from this story before moving on to a WIP.

In this scene, Melissa is arguing with her dad about staying at the country house. This is in Melissa’s POV and she is the first to speak:

“Why couldn’t you let me stay home? I’m eighteen!”

He looked up with his signature intimidating smile. “My teenage daughter…alone for three days in our house that’s worth three hundred thousand, hmmmm…”

I let out a heavy sigh, knowing where this was going. Gee Dad, way to be a dick!

“I fail to see the logic in that scenario, so if you think I’m going to take that chance, you’ve got another thing coming, young lady. Besides, this is a family vacation, and I want us all together. You want to go to college in Los Angeles, but you can’t take in a few days out in the country, this I cannot di-”

“Don’t make that comparison, Dad!”

Lots of tension here. It seems like poor Melissa can’t win. Their relationship changes as the story progresses. Well, I’d love to know your thoughts. I will be away from W.W.W. as I will be out of town for the weekend. Have a fantastic Sunday!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Do What Mother Says

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link if you want to see the official list of participating writers. More from The Burning Night, a YA horror novella.

This snippet features the last scene between Melissa and her mother (before the scariness in the house begins). This has been edited from the original in order to meet the sentence limit. Melissa’s mom asks her daughter to spend some time with Ashley. She speaks first, asking Melissa to watch over her while she and her husband go out for the evening.

“And keep an eye on her…you know, just in case.”

Anything else, Mom? Want me to read her a bedtime story, too? She always worried about Ashley whenever she was out with friends or anywhere she and Dad couldn’t watch her. I guess it was mostly because Ashley had low blood pressure and got cold easily, but I knew how to handle it.

“Don’t worry, I’ll take care of her.”

“And put some socks on when you go downstairs, I don’t want you walking around in your bare feet.”

I grunted heavily with a roll of my eyes.

“I mean it, young lady! Don’t disobey me, or I will ground you.”

If you thought her mother was in on what happens later, this proves she isn’t. Given what lies ahead, her mom should’ve said ‘put on some asbestos socks.’

I’d love to hear from you regarding this snippet. This will be the last time I participate with Weekend Writing Warriors until the end of August. It’s finally vacation time for me and I will be going to Florida for a month and a half with some friends. I’ll be editing this story during that time. I will likely be back on W.W.W. in September. I’ll miss you all! Have fun today, whatever your plans are.

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