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Weekend Writing Warriors – “Come ‘ere and say that!” #8Sunday

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Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors and happy post-Cinco de Mayo! Click on the link for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors. Thanks for including me in your Sunday reading!

Continuing with another snippet from Due For Love, we pick up from last week’s edition. Melissa was attempting to water the plants in her dad’s garden when the patio deck suddenly burns her feet (it’s plus ninety outside). Her ex-boyfriend, who has a part-time job taking care of Melissa’s next-door neighbor’s house, laughs at her misfortune. The snippet has been formatted to meet the ten sentence rule.

Warning: snippet contains coarse language; reader discretion advised

Mocking laughter sails through the air behind me as I pour an entire can’s worth of water all around my feet in order to cool this damn deck down, before collapsing onto the patio couch.

“Melissa, yo-you’re too much,” Chris teases in between guffawing. After three years together, I can recognize that sometimes-squeaky voice instantly, and if he’d knew what was good for him, he’d shut the fuck up before I rip his damn throat out!

        I snap my head over my shoulder, wincing as I caress the bottoms of feet, to find Chris with his arms wrapped over the fence. “The hell you laughin’ at?!”

       “You…the star of your new show,” he quips with a cheeky smile.

       “What fuckin’ show?”

      “Melissa on a Hot Tin Deck!”

      Ignoring the burns, I jump to my feet and lock eyes with the boy that killed three years of love with five cruel words. “Come ‘ere and say that to my face, ya little shit!”

Well Chris should be more sensitive – and run for his life! Your thoughts and feedback are much appreciated! And many thanks to everyone for congratulating me on my new job!

I’m off to Madrid on Wednesday, which means I will be away from W.W.W. for a bit. I’ll be visiting friends in Spain, Portugal, Poland and Germany over three weeks, and I will finally get to meet my friend, Elyzabeth M. Valey!

Hopefully, spring is being good to you wherever you are! See you again soon!

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Weekend Writing Warriors – “Thanks for Nothin’!”

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The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors. Thank you everyone for your helpful comments last week. I would like to especially thank, Veronica Scott, for her informative feedback – thanks Veronica!

Continuing today with my YA WIP, Cruel Summer, I’ve skipped a few lines in this week’s snippet. Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car to take her sister out for late night waffles. Dad wouldn’t oblige on the count of a speeding ticket she got, which happened before the story began. Melissa and her dad argue, but to no avail Melissa loses. Feeling this is unfair, she let’s her feelings be known:

“Good talkin’ to ya, Dad,” I said, throwing up my hands, “thanks for nothin’!”

I spun on my heels and left his study.

“Melissa Lauren Isabel McNamara, get back here at once,” Dad retorted coldly as I was passing our pool table, his voice stinging my back like needles.

I dragged my feet towards him, the crimson burning in his eyes made my heart shudder as he stood up from his leather office chair.

“I understand your feelings of resentment because you didn’t get your way,” he said sternly. “But I have worked very hard to provide for you and your sister, ever since the day your mother’s life was taken from us, so I suggest you not channel that misguided teenage immaturity in the form of a thoughtless insult.”

 I gulped, wishing I had just left the room without mouthing back at him, but I kept my posture straight so he wouldn’t know he was getting to me.

Dad leaned forward, the anger in his eyes hitting me harder. “Thanks to me, you are fortunate to have a roof over your head and food to eat. There are countless children in this world, your age and younger, that live in such great poverty and abuse…you may wish to keep that in mind, young lady!”

Well Melissa, he kicked your butt! She should have followed her own advice indeed! Thoughts? Feedback?

Thank you for visiting my blog today, and I hope you will visit other authors participating today. I will be back to share more snippets in May, as I will be embarking on my month long voyage to South America next week! I’m very excited as I’ve never been and always wanted to go! I’m especially looking forward to Machu Picchu, Argentina and Chile!

Have a great weekend!

 

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – “Have You Ever Considered Yoga?”

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Welcome to the 8-10 sentence blog hop Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to see who’s participating, and find out how you can join in. The temperatures seem to be doing that rollercoaster thingie here in Cincinnati, which means you gotta take advantage of the warm days. I’m offering a final excerpt from Room For Three. And when I say final I mean it will be the last one for the time being. The snippet has been modified to meet the 10-sentence limit.

Sarah is wearing Joey’s shoes without permission, and Joey demands that she take them off. Sarah isn’t listening. This is in Joey’s POV and she speaks first:

 

 “I said get your dirty feet outta my flip flops now!”

 A couple of girls snicker to my left as more heads turn our way.

“My feet aren’t dirty, silly,” Sarah says with laughter floating up from her throat.

With my hands firmly on my hips, I step forward until my toes touch hers. “Sarah, I’m not kiddin’ around, go home and get your own shoes on! If you’re gonna live with me and Mike, you’ll-“

“Have you, like, considered doing yoga?” With a phony smile, she waves her hands in a circular motion in front of my face. “Seriously, you need to, like, do somethin’ about these negative vibes you’re givin’ off, they’re kinda creepin’ me out.”

 

Boy, Sarah just doesn’t get it. As a result of a history of sibling rivalry, Sarah is getting back at her sister, and her vengeful acts will only get worse as the story goes on. I hope you’ve enjoyed snippets from this story, and next week I will move on to another story.

I welcome your feedback as it helps with the editing process. Keep in mind that this is an unedited first draft version.

Thanks for visiting my blog today!

 

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