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Weekend Writing Warriors – Please, Dad?

Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. You can also find me in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! And thanks to everyone for your constructive feedback last week! I’ve incorporated your suggestions in the draft.

I’m continuing from my WIP, Driving Me Wild.  Last week, Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car for the day. The snippet skips a few lines where they continue arguing and begins with her dad making his case. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:

 

“I will say this one last time, Melissa, when a sufficient period of time has passed, we shall discuss the possibility of you using my car again. A sufficient period of time has not passed, and therefore you are prohibited from driving the car, is that understood?”

I wince with an overload of coffee-fumed breath attacking my nostrils. “Is there, like, any chance this sufficient period of time will pass before the Bengals win another Super Bowl?”

He presses his balled fists into his hips, and I swallow hard with the fire in his eyes burning into mine. Guess the Bengals pun is a little too much. “It will pass when I say so, Melissa Lauren Isabel.”

“C’mon, Dad, just let me drive it for, like, this one day. Do it for me, I won’t ask for any-”
 “I wouldn’t do it for the state governor!”

 

 

Well…looks like Dad has made his point. You lose, Melissa. Dad and her butt heads quite a bit in the story.

Anyway, comments and feedback are most appreciated. Next time, we will focus on a different chapter.

Wishing everyone good health, and most of all happiness and solidarity during this very difficult and uncertain time. Need some inspiration on beating COVID-19 lockdown? Check out my post, which comes out tomorrow morning!

 

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Melissa Can’t Win

The first Weekend Writing Warriors of November is here. Click on the link to see how you can join us, or to see who else is participating today. I hope you all had a great Halloween, whether it was trick-or-treating with the kids, or a classic Halloween party. Time to look to Thanksgiving, Christmas and most of all NaNoWriMo. I’m offering a snippet from The Burning Night. This will be the last snippet I share from this story before moving on to a WIP.

In this scene, Melissa is arguing with her dad about staying at the country house. This is in Melissa’s POV and she is the first to speak:

“Why couldn’t you let me stay home? I’m eighteen!”

He looked up with his signature intimidating smile. “My teenage daughter…alone for three days in our house that’s worth three hundred thousand, hmmmm…”

I let out a heavy sigh, knowing where this was going. Gee Dad, way to be a dick!

“I fail to see the logic in that scenario, so if you think I’m going to take that chance, you’ve got another thing coming, young lady. Besides, this is a family vacation, and I want us all together. You want to go to college in Los Angeles, but you can’t take in a few days out in the country, this I cannot di-”

“Don’t make that comparison, Dad!”

Lots of tension here. It seems like poor Melissa can’t win. Their relationship changes as the story progresses. Well, I’d love to know your thoughts. I will be away from W.W.W. as I will be out of town for the weekend. Have a fantastic Sunday!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Meet Melissa’s Dad

Welcome to the wonderful world of Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link if you would like to participate, and/or view other posts by talented writers.

Sorry I didn’t participate last week. Things got really rough last week, and let’s just say I needed that Sunday to be out in nature and alone with my thoughts. I’m alright now, but your thoughts and prayers are most appreciated. It’s always great to know I have friends like you on my side.

Anyway, another snippet from The Burning Night, which is two chapters away from being finished.

This snippet features my MC, Melissa, and her father. After she sees the inside of the country house, she goes outside on the pretense of needing fresh air. Her dad is annoyed by her reactions to the house, and lets her know.

Footsteps thumped behind me, and I suddenly felt my hoodie being tugged. Turning around, I saw my father’s fiery eyes locked onto me as he folded arms across his chest.

            “Ever since I announced this trip, you’ve done nothing but complain. I’ve told you a hundred times we need a vacation – I need a vacation! It’s been a very rough year for me!”

            “Whatever, Dad,” I said sourly. Since when does a high school principal get stressed out? I’m glad I wasn’t at his school. “Why couldn’t we have gone to Florida or Hawaii?”

            “Your perception of reality concerns me, young lady.”

This fight is only just beginning, and my next few snippets will focus on this scene. I will be away next weekend as I’m attending a writing workshop in Columbus, Ohio. I will be back on W.W.W. the following week.

I’d love to know your thoughts on this snippet, and I will do my best to read yours today.

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