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Weekend Writing Warriors – Please, Dad?

Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. You can also find me in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! And thanks to everyone for your constructive feedback last week! I’ve incorporated your suggestions in the draft.

I’m continuing from my WIP, Driving Me Wild.  Last week, Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car for the day. The snippet skips a few lines where they continue arguing and begins with her dad making his case. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:

 

“I will say this one last time, Melissa, when a sufficient period of time has passed, we shall discuss the possibility of you using my car again. A sufficient period of time has not passed, and therefore you are prohibited from driving the car, is that understood?”

I wince with an overload of coffee-fumed breath attacking my nostrils. “Is there, like, any chance this sufficient period of time will pass before the Bengals win another Super Bowl?”

He presses his balled fists into his hips, and I swallow hard with the fire in his eyes burning into mine. Guess the Bengals pun is a little too much. “It will pass when I say so, Melissa Lauren Isabel.”

“C’mon, Dad, just let me drive it for, like, this one day. Do it for me, I won’t ask for any-”
 “I wouldn’t do it for the state governor!”

 

 

Well…looks like Dad has made his point. You lose, Melissa. Dad and her butt heads quite a bit in the story.

Anyway, comments and feedback are most appreciated. Next time, we will focus on a different chapter.

Wishing everyone good health, and most of all happiness and solidarity during this very difficult and uncertain time. Need some inspiration on beating COVID-19 lockdown? Check out my post, which comes out tomorrow morning!

 

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Weekend Writing Warriors/Snippet Sunday – Borrowing Dad’s Car

This is the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. I’m also participating in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! I’m so glad to be back after a long hiatus. Hopefully, this will help with the COVID-19 blues.

I’m offering a snippet from my WIP, Driving Me Wild (formerly Love Conquers). This comes from the first chapter where heroine, Melissa, has asked her dad if she can borrow his car so she can drive her friends to a theme park. The snippet, which is in Melissa’s POV, begins with her dad’s reaction. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:

 

My dad’s brows shoot up. “I suggest you find an alternate payback method, young lady! My car is off limits, and that’s final!”
“Are you, like, still pissed about that?”
“You better believe it, Melissa Lauren Isabel! When you got your license, I asked you to obey the traffic laws as a condition of using my vehicle. And you went out and got a fifty-five-dollar speeding ticket!”
A couple of months ago, I was pulled over for speeding through a residential area while on my way to a pool party hosted by one of Cass’s friends.
“Dad, it wasn’t my fault, I-”
“You went ten miles over the speeding limit,” he reminds me with flaring nostrils.

 

I guess we know where this going. This dilemma is one of Melissa’s obstacles in the story. As this is the first draft, your thoughts and constructive feedback are most welcome and appreciated; they will aid during the editing stages.

The blurb can be found here.

 

In case everyone is wondering, I am doing fine despite the pandemic. Staying active, keeping mentally and physically fit the best I can, and catching up on writing. My thoughts go out to all feeling the COVID-19 blues, especially those facing total lockdown.

See you next time!

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Weekend Writing Warriors – “Thanks for Nothin’!”

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The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors. Thank you everyone for your helpful comments last week. I would like to especially thank, Veronica Scott, for her informative feedback – thanks Veronica!

Continuing today with my YA WIP, Cruel Summer, I’ve skipped a few lines in this week’s snippet. Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car to take her sister out for late night waffles. Dad wouldn’t oblige on the count of a speeding ticket she got, which happened before the story began. Melissa and her dad argue, but to no avail Melissa loses. Feeling this is unfair, she let’s her feelings be known:

“Good talkin’ to ya, Dad,” I said, throwing up my hands, “thanks for nothin’!”

I spun on my heels and left his study.

“Melissa Lauren Isabel McNamara, get back here at once,” Dad retorted coldly as I was passing our pool table, his voice stinging my back like needles.

I dragged my feet towards him, the crimson burning in his eyes made my heart shudder as he stood up from his leather office chair.

“I understand your feelings of resentment because you didn’t get your way,” he said sternly. “But I have worked very hard to provide for you and your sister, ever since the day your mother’s life was taken from us, so I suggest you not channel that misguided teenage immaturity in the form of a thoughtless insult.”

 I gulped, wishing I had just left the room without mouthing back at him, but I kept my posture straight so he wouldn’t know he was getting to me.

Dad leaned forward, the anger in his eyes hitting me harder. “Thanks to me, you are fortunate to have a roof over your head and food to eat. There are countless children in this world, your age and younger, that live in such great poverty and abuse…you may wish to keep that in mind, young lady!”

Well Melissa, he kicked your butt! She should have followed her own advice indeed! Thoughts? Feedback?

Thank you for visiting my blog today, and I hope you will visit other authors participating today. I will be back to share more snippets in May, as I will be embarking on my month long voyage to South America next week! I’m very excited as I’ve never been and always wanted to go! I’m especially looking forward to Machu Picchu, Argentina and Chile!

Have a great weekend!

 

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