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Weekend Writing Warriors – Don’t Bother Daddy!

The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors.

 

I’m glad to be back after a long absence from W.W.W. More on that after the snippet. I’m offering an excerpt from my new WIP, Cruel Summer, which is a coming-of-age YA contemporary that takes place in Cincinnati.

In this snippet, Melissa approaches her dad in his study and asks why he’s not attending to Ashley, her younger sister who’s heartbroken after her boyfriend cheated on her. Dad doesn’t take kindly to being disturbed while working. Note that this is a different Melissa and Ashley, and not the ones from my other story; I just thought it would be nice to have my heroines with the same names – I dunno!

This is Melissa’s POV and creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit:

Dad lifted his head up from his laptop amid his fingers clicking away happily on the keyboard. His glasses slid down to the tip of his nose as he greeted me with a lowered brow. I simply folded my arms and tapped my foot, letting him know I didn’t care if I was disturbing whatever he was working on.

“Are you, like, aware Ashley’s upstairs in tears?” I asked him.

“Are you, like, aware that I have a deadline to meet? Are you also aware I warned her about that witless impudent?”

I blinked at the annoyance shooting from his eyes into mine.

“Now I know you’re not down here to check on me, so out with it, young lady.”

You couldn’t fool my dad, he always had that weird ability to read people.

“I wanna borrow the car,” I said,”I wanna take Ashley out to Ariane’s for some waffles.”

 

Ariane’s is a fictitious diner in the story. The tension between Melissa and her dad is a subplot of the story, and it stems from the fact that Melissa wants to live her own life.

Blurb: When her younger sister starts dating a young man with a dark side, life turns upside down for Melissa. She’ll need the help from the last person she would go to – her ex-boyfriend.

Thoughts and feedback is much appreciated, keeping in mind this is a W.I.P.

So where the heck have I been? Sorry, I’ve been working two jobs since October and trying to keep up with my Rotary duties. Sadly, writing has also been on the back-burner. No matter, I’m just happy I’ve finally made some time to be with you all again. I’ll share another snippet from this story next week.

Thanks for visiting me today!

Frank

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Rumble at the Table

The is the 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the list of participators and rules for participation. What a week it’s been, especially for those of you in the U.K.. I can’t believe Britain is actually leaving the E.U.

More from Never Let Go. Last week we got a glimpse of Melissa and Ashley’s father albeit his reaction to a gift from Ashley’s boyfriend.

In this excerpt, Melissa addresses her concern to her family during dinner about a minivan parked outside the country house, which she noticed in a scene earlier. Her mom explains that it belongs to the owner of a house named Angie, who leaves it there when she’s not present. Melissa, however, doesn’t buy it. She’s the first to speak:

“She has one car, but leaves the other one here…in the middle of the woods? C’mon, am I only one at this table who thinks that’s a little stupid?”

My parents glowered at me with their arms folded across their chests.

“I know what you’re trying to do, young lady,” my dad said disapprovingly, “but it will not work.”

“Oh knock it off Dad, I swear you just love bullyin’ me, don’tcha?!”

“Melissa don’t talk back to your father,” my mother barked.

Ashley rubbed her temples, muttering under her breath.

There was no point fighting with Dad – not in front of Ashley. She had witnessed more of our heated arguments than she would’ve liked to remember.

“I’m goin’ back to my room,” I declared, picking up my plate and washing it in the sink.

 

Things are heating up between Melissa and her dad. She’s also right about the minivan as the mystery behind it is revealed later in the story.

I will be away next week, so you won’t see my name on the list.

Thanks for visiting my blog and taking the time to read this excerpt. Feel free to offer your feedback!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Father Knows Best…Not!

This is the 8-10 sentence blog hop, Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the list of participators and rules for participation. I’m so glad you’ve stopped by to read my snippet.

I’m offering another excerpt from Never Let Go. We shift away from Ashley teasing Melissa to another theme of the story: father-daughter relationship.

In this scene, Melissa, Ashley and their parents are having their first meal at the country home where they’re staying. Ashley’s mother admires her daughter’s leather bracelet, which is a gift from her new boyfriend. When Ashley tries to get her dad to admire it, he offers a different point of view. The narration is in Melissa’s POV:

Dad glazed over the bracelet and offered a half-hearted shrug. “It would be more beautiful it came from someone with more class and manners.”

“Kevin,” my mom snapped as Ashley’s face instantly fell.

“Daddy, how can you say that?”

“You know how I feel about that boy,” he reached for another slice of garlic bread. “It’s obvious those green eyes and brown curls have you under his spell, but I know a simpleton when I see one. If you wish to find out the hard way, like your sister did with Chris, you are more than welcome.”    

“That’s not fair, Dad, you don’t know Steve at all, he-”

“It’s a beautiful bracelet,” I jumped in, narrowing my eyes at Dad. “And Steve’s so much better than Chris, he treats Ashley like a princess and makes her happy, so that’s all that matters.”

 

Well kudos to Melissa for standing up for her little sister. I think this snippet coincides perfectly with it being Father’s Day and all. Later in the story, you discover that Dad was right all along. I’m sorry that I didn’t get around to visiting everyone’s posts last week. It’s been kind of hectic with Euro 2016 going on. I’ll do my best to read and comment today. Thanks in advance for all your feedback!

Happy Father’s Day to all the fathers out there, especially my own dad who has been the best dad a child could have in my opinion.

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