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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Do What Mother Says

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link if you want to see the official list of participating writers. More from The Burning Night, a YA horror novella.

This snippet features the last scene between Melissa and her mother (before the scariness in the house begins). This has been edited from the original in order to meet the sentence limit. Melissa’s mom asks her daughter to spend some time with Ashley. She speaks first, asking Melissa to watch over her while she and her husband go out for the evening.

“And keep an eye on her…you know, just in case.”

Anything else, Mom? Want me to read her a bedtime story, too? She always worried about Ashley whenever she was out with friends or anywhere she and Dad couldn’t watch her. I guess it was mostly because Ashley had low blood pressure and got cold easily, but I knew how to handle it.

“Don’t worry, I’ll take care of her.”

“And put some socks on when you go downstairs, I don’t want you walking around in your bare feet.”

I grunted heavily with a roll of my eyes.

“I mean it, young lady! Don’t disobey me, or I will ground you.”

If you thought her mother was in on what happens later, this proves she isn’t. Given what lies ahead, her mom should’ve said ‘put on some asbestos socks.’

I’d love to hear from you regarding this snippet. This will be the last time I participate with Weekend Writing Warriors until the end of August. It’s finally vacation time for me and I will be going to Florida for a month and a half with some friends. I’ll be editing this story during that time. I will likely be back on W.W.W. in September. I’ll miss you all! Have fun today, whatever your plans are.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#Sunday – A Little Lullaby

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors the 8-10 sentence blog hop featuring many talented writers. Click on the link if you want to see the official list, and/or view the guidelines on how to participate. Happy Father’s Day to those in the U.S. and Canada. Today I’m continuing to offer another snippet from The Burning Night. Melissa’s mom tries to make her daughter feel a little more comfortable in the country house where they are staying in. She sings her a lullaby that she used to sing to her as a little girl. This snippet is formatted in the 10 sentence limit, and this is Melissa’s POV:

She pulled me into her arms, resting my face on her shoulder. The scent of perfume was even stronger as she rocked me back and forth. The hotness of her breath tickled my back.

“The moon is up, the stars are out, the world’s asleep toni-iiight,” she sang. That old lullaby she used to sing to me and Ashley when we were little. “The comfy sheets keep you warm from your little shoulders down to your baby toes, toni-iiight. My love will protect you from the evil fright, wrapping around you all through the ni-iiight.”
      Her soothing words caressed me from head to toe. Memories of her coming into my room and singing to me after a bad dream instantly flashed in my mind. I purred as her fingers trailed down my back.

Who says lullabies are just for kids? You find this particular one later in the story. Your feedback with this is much appreciated. I will share one more snippet next week before I go away on vacation. Thanks for stopping by today and be sure to visit other participating writers.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8sunday – A Mother’s Advice

For a neat way to read snippets from a variety of authors, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. You’ll find the list of participating authors, as well as guidelines if you want to participate yourself. Thanks for visiting my blog. I’m sharing a snippet from The Burning Night.

Set-up: Melissa’s mother visits her in her bedroom, where they are having a mother-daughter moment. Melissa is complaining about her father (they’ve been butting heads). Her mom offers her take on her husband, and she speaks first.

“Your father just doesn’t like the idea of you going to college so far away from home. He wishes you were going somewhere closer, like Syracuse. He thinks he can change your mind.”

Like that was going to happen.

“Just try to get along with him, it would be nice if we could have just one day without you two causing a war.”

I looked at her with a lowered brow. He needs to get along with me, Mom.

She shook her head slowly and said, “Look, after a good night’s sleep this place will feel like home. Whatever is bothering you about this house, it’s just all in your head…I know you all too well, sweetie.”

 She clutched my hands, warming them instantly – the kind of warmth only a mother’s touch could bring.

 

If you’re wondering, Melissa is going to go to college in California. I don’t think the weirdness of the house is in Melissa’s head. The conversation continues next week. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this snippet!

Enjoy your day!

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