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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Dad Attacks!

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the 8-10 sentence blog hop where you sample excerpts of great stories. I’m enjoying my vacation back home in southern Ontario, though it has been a hot week here!

My excerpt today comes from Never Let Go. The last snippet left off where Melissa and her father got into an argument. In this scene, things heat up for the worst. We are in Melissa’a POV and her dad speaks first:

“We’re staying here, Melissa, rebel all you wish, but it will not change a thing…remember that.”

“And I’m going to UCLA, Dad…remember that!”

He sipped his tea as his eyes met me with total coolness. “Well I’m sure your foolish post-secondary pursuit will add to the collection of mistakes you have accumulated this year.”

“What’s that supposed to mean?” Mom challenged him.

“Puh-leeze Vanessa, the car accident, Chris, the party in which I had to come to her rescue…all because our immature firstborn would not heed the sage advice of her father.”

Hundreds of words formed on my tongue, each one eager to leap out of my mouth and sting Dad.

My mother and sister glowered at Dad as he locked eyes with me and slurped his tea.“You know now that I think of it, I begin to wonder if your immaturity is the real reason your so-called boyfriend resorted to infidelity.”

 

Well Dad’s gone too far, and Melissa won’t stand for it. Find out in the next snippet what she does. Comments are most welcome and appreciated. Have a great weekend!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Father Knows Best…Not!

This is the 8-10 sentence blog hop, Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for the list of participators and rules for participation. I’m so glad you’ve stopped by to read my snippet.

I’m offering another excerpt from Never Let Go. We shift away from Ashley teasing Melissa to another theme of the story: father-daughter relationship.

In this scene, Melissa, Ashley and their parents are having their first meal at the country home where they’re staying. Ashley’s mother admires her daughter’s leather bracelet, which is a gift from her new boyfriend. When Ashley tries to get her dad to admire it, he offers a different point of view. The narration is in Melissa’s POV:

Dad glazed over the bracelet and offered a half-hearted shrug. “It would be more beautiful it came from someone with more class and manners.”

“Kevin,” my mom snapped as Ashley’s face instantly fell.

“Daddy, how can you say that?”

“You know how I feel about that boy,” he reached for another slice of garlic bread. “It’s obvious those green eyes and brown curls have you under his spell, but I know a simpleton when I see one. If you wish to find out the hard way, like your sister did with Chris, you are more than welcome.”    

“That’s not fair, Dad, you don’t know Steve at all, he-”

“It’s a beautiful bracelet,” I jumped in, narrowing my eyes at Dad. “And Steve’s so much better than Chris, he treats Ashley like a princess and makes her happy, so that’s all that matters.”

 

Well kudos to Melissa for standing up for her little sister. I think this snippet coincides perfectly with it being Father’s Day and all. Later in the story, you discover that Dad was right all along. I’m sorry that I didn’t get around to visiting everyone’s posts last week. It’s been kind of hectic with Euro 2016 going on. I’ll do my best to read and comment today. Thanks in advance for all your feedback!

Happy Father’s Day to all the fathers out there, especially my own dad who has been the best dad a child could have in my opinion.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – So Mature!

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Welcome to the midsummer portion of Weekend Writing Warriors. It feels strange now that the World Cup is over (sigh). I hope you are having a great weekend so far. I’ve been volunteering at a local beer festival this weekend. Thanks to everyone who commented on my previous snippet. I’m sharing an eight from, The Burning Night. This eight picks up a few lines from last week’s snippet.

Set-up: Melissa and Ashley are relaxing on the bed in Melissa’s room. Ashley asks Melissa what’s bothering her and she answers by complaining about the house. Ashley reminds Melissa about her difficulties with their father. Melissa is the first to speak as she makes her case about her dad.

The eight:

 

“He’s just pissed that I’m going to U.C.L.A. and not Syracuse, like he always wanted…big deal. He sooo doesn’t get it, it’s him that’s got the problem not me!”

“Typical Melissa Lauren Murdock…it’s always someone else’s fault,” she clucked her tongue and gave me a condescending smile. Crossing my arms, I raised my brows at her for using my middle name as well as being ‘Little Miss Daddy’s Girl’. Given that her legs were outstretched beside me, it was tempting to just grab them and tickle her feet, which she would’ve hated. My conscience butted in, so I snatched a slipper off her right foot and tossed it against the door. Shifting her head, she watched as her shoe bounced off the door and plopped on the ground. Wiggling her toes, she shook her head and quipped, “So mature.”

 

Do you agree with Ashley? I know I do! I’ll share a few snippets as to why Melissa hates the house soon. In case you’re wondering about Melissa and Ashley being alone in the house: their parents want to spend the evening in the local town, but Melissa didn’t want to go. Being eighteen, her father feels she is old enough to be home and look after Ashley.

I welcome your feedback and look forward to reading your snippets today, however I won’t get to this until the evening since I’m volunteering today. I will be absent from next week’s W.W.W. as I will be in Los Angeles visiting a friend of mine there. Click on the above link for the official list of participating authors.

 

 

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