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Weekend Writing Warriors – Ashley’s New Boyfriend

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Happy Easter! The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors.

Guess who’s back? I’m so glad to be participating after my longest absence ever! I’m offering an excerpt from my new WIP, Do for Love (formerly Cruel Summer), which is a coming-of-age YA contemporary that takes place in Cincinnati.

In this snippet, Melissa and Ashley are eating breakfast when their dad asks to meet Ashley’s new boyfriend, Logan.

This is Melissa’s POV and creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit:

Ashley looks at Dad with surprise as he goes on about how Logan’s parents are likely curious to meet her. The funny thing is, she hasn’t mentioned one word about them yet.

The pink in her cheeks vanishes instantly, replaced by milky paleness. She tucks her legs under her, sitting cross-legged in the chair and blinking rapidly at Dad, while twirling her hair with one finger. A piece of black fabric from her slippers falls off the bottom of her right foot and tumbles to the floor, as she rubs her toes.

I’m not sure why she’s nervous about Dad wanting to meet Logan, especially since she’s been dating him for almost two weeks. Dad insisted on meeting Chris after only a week. If he knew about the pics of her and Logan making out on Facebook, Instagram and Snapchat, he’d surely have wanted to meet him sooner.

“This is your first boyfriend, honeycake,” Dad says soothingly, “I simply want to meet the special boy in my little princess’s life.”

Since when is she his little princess? I’m the eldest, why can’t I be his princess?

 

Blurb: When her younger sister starts dating a young man with a dark side, life turns upside down for Melissa. She’ll need the help from the last person she would go to – her ex-boyfriend.

Well I think Melissa is entitled to being the little princess. FYI, Chris is Melissa’s ex, who will play an important role in the story. Thoughts and feedback are much appreciated!

I’m so sorry I’ve been away for all this time! The new life, which I embarked on last September, has not been as kind to me as I was hoping, and as a result kept me from participating and writing in general. However, I will soon embark on a new chapter, one of which I have been dreaming about for many years. Details of that will come at a time of my choosing. I hope you are all well! Life has not been the same without the magic of W.W.W.

Thanks for visiting me today, and I look forward to reading your lovely snippets!

Frank

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Melissa Can’t Win

The first Weekend Writing Warriors of November is here. Click on the link to see how you can join us, or to see who else is participating today. I hope you all had a great Halloween, whether it was trick-or-treating with the kids, or a classic Halloween party. Time to look to Thanksgiving, Christmas and most of all NaNoWriMo. I’m offering a snippet from The Burning Night. This will be the last snippet I share from this story before moving on to a WIP.

In this scene, Melissa is arguing with her dad about staying at the country house. This is in Melissa’s POV and she is the first to speak:

“Why couldn’t you let me stay home? I’m eighteen!”

He looked up with his signature intimidating smile. “My teenage daughter…alone for three days in our house that’s worth three hundred thousand, hmmmm…”

I let out a heavy sigh, knowing where this was going. Gee Dad, way to be a dick!

“I fail to see the logic in that scenario, so if you think I’m going to take that chance, you’ve got another thing coming, young lady. Besides, this is a family vacation, and I want us all together. You want to go to college in Los Angeles, but you can’t take in a few days out in the country, this I cannot di-”

“Don’t make that comparison, Dad!”

Lots of tension here. It seems like poor Melissa can’t win. Their relationship changes as the story progresses. Well, I’d love to know your thoughts. I will be away from W.W.W. as I will be out of town for the weekend. Have a fantastic Sunday!

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