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I’m sharing an excerpt from Never Let Go, which picks up from the last snippet from two weeks ago. Teen sisters, Melissa and Ashley, are trapped in a strange room where Emily and her daughters are watching them through a skylight. The last snippet finished with Emily threatening to hurt Melissa, which sends her into a state of fright. This snippet opens with her younger sister, Ashley, speaking:
“Don’t listen to her, Mel, she’s bluffin’, she’s just tryin’ to scare us!”
I turned to her as I rubbed the goosebumps dancing on my arms. “I-I d-d-don’t think she is.”“Bluffing am I? Oh little Ashley McNamara, you are very much like your father,” Emily said, casting a freaky smile on my baby sister.
“Go to hell lady, just shut up and let us outta here, or I’ll co-”
“Hush up impetuous teenager and dance!” Emily leaned over the edge of the skylight, disappearing from sight, and loud ‘click-click’ sounded from above, making my heart jump.
Emily reappeared, as she and her daughters smiled at us like the witch from The Wizard of Oz.
I dipped my chin to the floor under feet, my eyes instantly bulged as it began to glow red.
Uh oh! The floor is glowing red! Many of you likely know what’s coming next, but don’t spoil it for those that are new to this story. I’ve edited this scene, and I’m looking for helpful critiquing. More to follow next week.
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