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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – What Was That?

The weekly writing blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for participation guidelines, and to see who else is participating today.

I’m sharing an excerpt from Never Let Go, which picks up from the last snippet from two weeks ago. Teen sisters, Melissa and Ashley, are trapped in a strange room where Emily and her daughters are watching them through a skylight. The last snippet finished with Emily threatening to hurt Melissa, which sends her into a state of fright. This snippet opens with her younger sister, Ashley, speaking:


            “Don’t listen to her, Mel, she’s bluffin’, she’s just tryin’ to scare us!”
            I turned to her as I rubbed the goosebumps dancing on my arms. “I-I d-d-don’t think she is.”     

             “Bluffing am I? Oh little Ashley McNamara, you are very much like your father,” Emily said, casting a freaky smile on my baby sister.

            “Go to hell lady, just shut up and let us outta here, or I’ll co-”

             “Hush up impetuous teenager and dance!” Emily leaned over the edge of the skylight, disappearing from sight, and loud ‘click-click’ sounded from above, making my heart jump.

              Emily reappeared, as she and her daughters smiled at us like the witch from The Wizard of Oz.

               I dipped my chin to the floor under feet, my eyes instantly bulged as it began to glow red.


Uh oh! The floor is glowing red! Many of you likely know what’s coming next, but don’t spoil it for those that are new to this story. I’ve edited this scene, and I’m looking for helpful critiquing. More to follow next week.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Do What Mother Says

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link if you want to see the official list of participating writers. More from The Burning Night, a YA horror novella.

This snippet features the last scene between Melissa and her mother (before the scariness in the house begins). This has been edited from the original in order to meet the sentence limit. Melissa’s mom asks her daughter to spend some time with Ashley. She speaks first, asking Melissa to watch over her while she and her husband go out for the evening.

“And keep an eye on her…you know, just in case.”

Anything else, Mom? Want me to read her a bedtime story, too? She always worried about Ashley whenever she was out with friends or anywhere she and Dad couldn’t watch her. I guess it was mostly because Ashley had low blood pressure and got cold easily, but I knew how to handle it.

“Don’t worry, I’ll take care of her.”

“And put some socks on when you go downstairs, I don’t want you walking around in your bare feet.”

I grunted heavily with a roll of my eyes.

“I mean it, young lady! Don’t disobey me, or I will ground you.”

If you thought her mother was in on what happens later, this proves she isn’t. Given what lies ahead, her mom should’ve said ‘put on some asbestos socks.’

I’d love to hear from you regarding this snippet. This will be the last time I participate with Weekend Writing Warriors until the end of August. It’s finally vacation time for me and I will be going to Florida for a month and a half with some friends. I’ll be editing this story during that time. I will likely be back on W.W.W. in September. I’ll miss you all! Have fun today, whatever your plans are.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8sunday – A Mother’s Advice

For a neat way to read snippets from a variety of authors, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. You’ll find the list of participating authors, as well as guidelines if you want to participate yourself. Thanks for visiting my blog. I’m sharing a snippet from The Burning Night.

Set-up: Melissa’s mother visits her in her bedroom, where they are having a mother-daughter moment. Melissa is complaining about her father (they’ve been butting heads). Her mom offers her take on her husband, and she speaks first.

“Your father just doesn’t like the idea of you going to college so far away from home. He wishes you were going somewhere closer, like Syracuse. He thinks he can change your mind.”

Like that was going to happen.

“Just try to get along with him, it would be nice if we could have just one day without you two causing a war.”

I looked at her with a lowered brow. He needs to get along with me, Mom.

She shook her head slowly and said, “Look, after a good night’s sleep this place will feel like home. Whatever is bothering you about this house, it’s just all in your head…I know you all too well, sweetie.”

 She clutched my hands, warming them instantly – the kind of warmth only a mother’s touch could bring.


If you’re wondering, Melissa is going to go to college in California. I don’t think the weirdness of the house is in Melissa’s head. The conversation continues next week. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this snippet!

Enjoy your day!

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