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Weekend Writing Warriors – “Love You, Mom.”

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Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors Click on the link for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors. Thanks for including me in your Sunday reading! In just a couple of weeks, I leave to start my new life teaching English in Poland!
I’m sharing a snippet from an untitled Young Adult WIP, which is formerly Due For Love. Same characters, just a different plot thanks to the advice of an author friend. This snippet takes place at the very beginning of the story, with the heroine, Melissa, waking up talking about the most precious thing to her. Please note that this is a first draft and the snippet is formatted to meet the ten sentence rule.

     I open my eyes, turn over in my bed and stare at a five-by-seven picture on my nightstand of my mother holding me in her arms when I was a year old. My dad used to take us to this park every Sunday, back in the good old days when we were living in my nation’s capital before life brought us to Cincinnati. During the warmer months, he and my mom would bring a blanket and a picnic basket and set up shop on the grass with the backdrop of the Potomac and the Washington skyline. One day, he decided to take a photo of her and I while we were sitting on a blanket.
     Dad says it’s the best photo of us and she’s never smiled so much in any other picture of her.
      It’s the only picture I have of her, and it’s the first thing I see every morning when I wake up no matter where in the world I am, and I never get out of bed without looking it. Her bright youthful smile and the way she caressed me, gives me the strength to face whatever crap life wants to throw at me that day.
     I trail a finger along the glass that protects the picture from dust. “Love you, Mom,” I whisper just I do every morning for the past thirteen years since her life was taken away from me by that drunk driver. I’ll continue the tradition every morning in my new dorm at UCLA when I move there in a few months.

Not a lot of action, but we learn quite a bit about Melissa in ten sentences. For the full blurb about the novel, click here.

Thoughts and feedback are most welcome as they will help with the revision stages. I will share more next week.

Sorry I’ve been away most of the summer. Busy getting ready for the big move, but it’s been a grand summer. I plan to keep participating once I’m across the Atlantic, so don’t fret! Enjoy your Sunday!

Question for my author friends: can anyone recommend some good online writing groups? Ones that help with perfecting writing craft/promotion, cover designs, etc. Feel free to include your recommendations in your comments? And thanks!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Do What Mother Says

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link if you want to see the official list of participating writers. More from The Burning Night, a YA horror novella.

This snippet features the last scene between Melissa and her mother (before the scariness in the house begins). This has been edited from the original in order to meet the sentence limit. Melissa’s mom asks her daughter to spend some time with Ashley. She speaks first, asking Melissa to watch over her while she and her husband go out for the evening.

“And keep an eye on her…you know, just in case.”

Anything else, Mom? Want me to read her a bedtime story, too? She always worried about Ashley whenever she was out with friends or anywhere she and Dad couldn’t watch her. I guess it was mostly because Ashley had low blood pressure and got cold easily, but I knew how to handle it.

“Don’t worry, I’ll take care of her.”

“And put some socks on when you go downstairs, I don’t want you walking around in your bare feet.”

I grunted heavily with a roll of my eyes.

“I mean it, young lady! Don’t disobey me, or I will ground you.”

If you thought her mother was in on what happens later, this proves she isn’t. Given what lies ahead, her mom should’ve said ‘put on some asbestos socks.’

I’d love to hear from you regarding this snippet. This will be the last time I participate with Weekend Writing Warriors until the end of August. It’s finally vacation time for me and I will be going to Florida for a month and a half with some friends. I’ll be editing this story during that time. I will likely be back on W.W.W. in September. I’ll miss you all! Have fun today, whatever your plans are.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#Sunday – A Little Lullaby

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors the 8-10 sentence blog hop featuring many talented writers. Click on the link if you want to see the official list, and/or view the guidelines on how to participate. Happy Father’s Day to those in the U.S. and Canada. Today I’m continuing to offer another snippet from The Burning Night. Melissa’s mom tries to make her daughter feel a little more comfortable in the country house where they are staying in. She sings her a lullaby that she used to sing to her as a little girl. This snippet is formatted in the 10 sentence limit, and this is Melissa’s POV:

She pulled me into her arms, resting my face on her shoulder. The scent of perfume was even stronger as she rocked me back and forth. The hotness of her breath tickled my back.

“The moon is up, the stars are out, the world’s asleep toni-iiight,” she sang. That old lullaby she used to sing to me and Ashley when we were little. “The comfy sheets keep you warm from your little shoulders down to your baby toes, toni-iiight. My love will protect you from the evil fright, wrapping around you all through the ni-iiight.”
      Her soothing words caressed me from head to toe. Memories of her coming into my room and singing to me after a bad dream instantly flashed in my mind. I purred as her fingers trailed down my back.

Who says lullabies are just for kids? You find this particular one later in the story. Your feedback with this is much appreciated. I will share one more snippet next week before I go away on vacation. Thanks for stopping by today and be sure to visit other participating writers.

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