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Weekend Writing Warriors – Melissa Gets It in the Arm

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Greetings all and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors.  I’m glad you’ve taken some time out of your day to read my snippet. I’m continuing from last week’s 8 of my YA horror novella, The Burning Night. I shared a bit of this scene many months ago, but I’ve completely edited it, so it’s more feasible

Set-up: Melissa is in shock as the cooktops on the stove are glowing by themselves. She tries to decipher the whole thing, when more scariness literally hits her.

The Eight:

 

I shuffled toward the stove and extended one hand over the burner as heat waves seeped through it. Two more burners started glowing, making me jump back. Covering my mouth with both hands, I stared hard at the burners when something sharp pierced through my right arm like a bullet.

“Oww!!”

I grabbed my arm and dropped to my knees. It was amazing the pitch of my scream didn’t shatter the window over the kitchen sink. With my arm throbbing, I gaped in horror at a dart stuck in it, infecting me with who-knew-what. I covered my mouth to keep from screaming, as I grimaced from the shooting pain.

 

Poor Melissa. The fact that she’s a teenager really has me feeling for her. Sadly, there’s more on the way for her.

Thoughts and feedback are always helpful. I’m going to a Bengals game this afternoon, so I won’t get to reading snippets until later this evening. Since this is my first NFL game, I’m excited yet curious as I don’t know what to expect.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Who Said That?

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It’s Sunday, which means another round of Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks for stopping by to view my snippet. I hope you are all enjoying the Labor Day weekend – I know I am! I apologize for not commenting on everyone’s snippets last week; I was out all day. This week I’m continuing to share a snippet from my YA horror novella, The Burning Night. As you will see the atmosphere shifts from previous snippets.

Set-up: Melissa is lying on her bed in her room alone, debating whether to join her sister, when a mysterious voice starts calling her name.

The Eight:

 

Hanging out with Ashley downstairs was tempting, since I knew I’d have more fun – we had similar tastes in TV shows. I glanced at an old-school clock on the table beside my bed, watching the numbers change as my eyes got heavy.

“Me-li-ssaaa…Me-li-ssaaa,” a drowsy female voice filled the air.

A sharp gasp escaped me while every muscle in my body froze.

“Me-li-ssaaa…Me-li-ssaaa, your time is coming,” the eerie voice drawled again from within the walls. With my mouth hanging open, I leapt off the bed and scanned every wall in the room. Chills gushed from my shoulders all the way down to my toes.

“Wh-who s-said that?”

 

Kinda spooky, no? This is just the beginning for Melissa. Ashley is in the basement watching TV, in case you are wondering. To be continued next week. Thoughts and feedback are much appreciated. I’ll be out all day at a water park, and then watching fireworks with friends later in the evening (big fireworks show today, where I live). I’ll do my best to read/comment on everyone’s snippets before I head out, however I’ll do more later tonight and Monday. I appreciate your patience.

As for the rest of my life, the transition to my new life has gone well and many thanks to everyone for the wishes! Sometimes I forget how many people care about my well-being. Even though we have never actually met, I consider you all my friends, so thanks!

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Ashley Where For Art Thou?

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Do you write? Have a story in progress that you want to share with the world? Weekend Writing Warriors is just the place for that. 8 sentences from your writing published/unpublished every Sunday. Thanks for stopping by my blog to read my post. I was originally going to skip out on this, but decided what the heck! Many thanks as well to everyone who provided constructive feedback. I don’t know how I could’ve made errors like that, but your honesty was appreciated.

Today, I’m continuing from my last eight of my YA horror short story, The Burning Night. I’m happy to say I finished the first draft last week (now for the editing). So far, the house is giving Melissa the creeps and now she’s trying to locate her younger sister, Ashley. She tries to call her name, but doesn’t get a response and now she’s worried. Here’s the eight, and hopefully I get this one right:

I called my sister’s name again, but she didn’t reply. Subzero fear twisted around my heart, then suddenly I heard laughter of an audience resonating from below. Looking ahead, I noticed a light coming from a stairwell. As I followed it, I saw Ashley’s slippers on top of a red mat by the edge of the stairwell. A sign was mounted on the wall above her slippers, written in black paint which read: LEAVE SHOES/SLIPPERS HERE BEFORE YOU GO IN THE BASEMENT.

My head flinched back slightly as I wondered why a homeowner would care if someone went into their basement with shoes on. The decayed stairs were gritty and dusty, making me turn up my nose.

            “Ashley, you actually went down those steps in your bare feet,” I muttered.

Now the sign might seem strange, but later in the story you’ll see why it’s there. As many of you know, Ashley will regret this, but don’t spoil it for those that haven’t read it. I’d love to get your feedback on this, and I shall do the same for you in return. 

I’m happy to say I’ll continue with this next week. Now that winter is coming to a close, I won’t be skiing every weekend (I’m gonna miss that). For those that read the earlier snippets of this story, I intend to share those scenes again. I’ve edited them and would love your feedback on it. Have a good Sunday everyone!

*I’m going to be out on a snowshoeing trip all day, so I won’t be able to read and comment on posts until late this evening. I’ll do my very best to get to everyone and I appreciate your patience.

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