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Weekend Writing Warriors – Watch Your Step!

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It’s the first edition of 2019 for the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Happy New Year everyone and thanks for visiting my blog!
I’m sharing a snippet from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Unfortunately, it’s not a holiday season read. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.
In this snippet, Melissa accidently steps on a thumbtack at home. Believing it to be a prank by her younger sister, Ashley, she takes it out on her when she comes to her aid. Creative editing has been used to meet the sentence limit.

       I take another step when something hard impales my foot. “Oww,” I grab my foot and hop around on the other, filling the air with every cuss word in the book.

       “Mel, are you okay?” Ashley’s voice sails from upstairs as I eventually lose my balance and collapse on the floor.

       Footsteps drum the staircase, and my eyes catch my sister, clad in a tank top and sky-blue pajama pants, racing toward me with a healthy mix of fright and concern in her aquamarine eyes.

       I spot a thumbtack lying on the floor, and then glare at her. “You little bitch,” I slam a balled fist into her foot, but she manages to jerk it out of her slipper just as my fist pounds the fuzzy black fabric.

       “Hey, what the fuck is your problem?” Ashley demands, sliding her foot back into her slipper.

        “Don’t play stupid with me, I’m gonna need a fuckin’ tetanus shot!”

 

Oh the agony of de-feet! Looks like Ashley is in trouble! What will Melissa do to her? More from this scene next time. Be sure to visit the blogs of other participating writers today.

On a personal note, my trip to Egypt was amazing! One of the best countries I’ve been to, despite the security situation there. I thought I would share a photo from the trip. Have a great weekend everyone!

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Weekend Writing Warriors – The Agony of De-feet!

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Exams are over, and now I can look forward to Christmas, especially as I am relaxing on the beaches of South Florida. Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, for all your reading needs. I’m offering one final snippet from The Burning Night, my YA horror novella. As it is the last 8 from this story, I decided to condense a paragraph’s worth into an excerpt so you could get a full sense of what’s going on. If you missed last week’s snippet, it can be found here.

Set-up: Teenage sisters, Melissa and Ashley, are trapped in a room. Thanks to a power switch, the entire floor has become scorching hot, making the girls to hop around as they try and preserve their feet. Emily and her daughters, Ally and Sandra delight in the girls suffering as they watch them “dance.” The image below shows how the floor would  look like.

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The eight:

“Whoa, look at ‘em dance, Mom,” Sandra chirped.

“And listen to them sing, it’s amazing how you can make a couple of teenagers dance and scream at the same time,” Emily cooed. 

Their heartless taunts hurt me almost as much this floor frying my skin like eggs. Lifting my head up, I forced a glare at the psychotic women through the agonizing pain, and cried, “You, ow, ow, si-sick bitches!”

“Shu-shut this floor off,” Ashley wailed.

“It won’t hurt much longer, my darlings.” Emily’s falsetto voice hardened ruthlessly as she boomed, “Because the nerve endings in your feet will be completely destroyed!”

I let out a scream that tore at my vocal cords and rattled my ribs, as I shook my right foot wildly in the air, while hopping on the other.

Oh their poor feet! Emily and her daughters are sick…sick, sick, sick! It’s hard to understand why Emily hates those girls so much. She just enjoys seeing people suffer. It’s the truth! As demented as she is, you have to admit that this is a clever way to torture someone. I hate having to end things here, but this isn’t published, and so I can only share so much.

The story ends on a positive note for the teens, and those women get what’s coming to them. I hope you have enjoyed reading these snippets, and will buy the book someday. Your feedback has made all the difference, and helped me understand my characters more. I thank everyone who commented on this last week, and do appreciate any thoughts today!

I’ll be taking some time off W.W.W. I expect to be back sometime in January, where I will share snippets from one of my other stories. I haven’t decided which one. In the meantime, Merry Christmas to all and a very Happy New Year!!

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Melissa Gets It in the Arm

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Greetings all and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors.  I’m glad you’ve taken some time out of your day to read my snippet. I’m continuing from last week’s 8 of my YA horror novella, The Burning Night. I shared a bit of this scene many months ago, but I’ve completely edited it, so it’s more feasible

Set-up: Melissa is in shock as the cooktops on the stove are glowing by themselves. She tries to decipher the whole thing, when more scariness literally hits her.

The Eight:

 

I shuffled toward the stove and extended one hand over the burner as heat waves seeped through it. Two more burners started glowing, making me jump back. Covering my mouth with both hands, I stared hard at the burners when something sharp pierced through my right arm like a bullet.

“Oww!!”

I grabbed my arm and dropped to my knees. It was amazing the pitch of my scream didn’t shatter the window over the kitchen sink. With my arm throbbing, I gaped in horror at a dart stuck in it, infecting me with who-knew-what. I covered my mouth to keep from screaming, as I grimaced from the shooting pain.

 

Poor Melissa. The fact that she’s a teenager really has me feeling for her. Sadly, there’s more on the way for her.

Thoughts and feedback are always helpful. I’m going to a Bengals game this afternoon, so I won’t get to reading snippets until later this evening. Since this is my first NFL game, I’m excited yet curious as I don’t know what to expect.

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Enjoy the rest of your weekend!

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