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Weekend Writing Warriors – The Good Sister

 

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This is the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks for visiting my blog! I’m glad I can be sharing in the Sunday Snippet magic. I hope spring has arrived early in your parts. It’s come early here in Poland!
I’m sharing a snippet from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.
This snippet takes place in a flashback where heroine, Melissa, recalls the day after her boyfriend dumped her. She has been in bed all day and is grief-stricken. In this scene, her sister, Ashley, tries to boost her spirits by inviting her to a yoga class. But yoga isn’t Melissa’s thing. Creative editing has been used to meet the sentence limit:

 

          Ashley scoots beside me on my bed, stretches her legs out and crosses her ankles. She wraps an arm around my shoulder and rests my head on her chest. My eyes instantly well up with tears. I’m glad she’s being an awesome sister but at the same time I just don’t want her to see me like this.
          “I’m goin’ to yoga class in an hour, wanna come? My studio, like, charges sixteen bucks to drop in, but I’ll cover ya.”
           She knows perfectly well that I hate yoga. I tried it once with Chris and quickly realized I’m not flexible enough to do all those weird poses. I was amazed I didn’t barf after being in a room for an hour full of people wearing too much cologne or perfume, not to mention stinky feet.
           “I’d rather walk barefoot over a bed of red-hot coals,” I groan.

Walk over hot coals? That’s a bit extreme, don’t you think, Melissa? Looks like Ashley is going to have to suggest something better to get her sister out of bed.

Your thoughts are much appreciated. Thanks again for visiting, and be sure to visit other participating authors’ blogs.

I’m up in Warsaw for the day, so it will take me awhile to respond to your comments.

Frank

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Heartbroken

 

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This is the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Happy St. Patrick’s Day everyone and thanks for visiting my blog! I’m glad I’ve finally found a free Sunday to be with you all!

I’m sharing a snippet from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Unfortunately, it’s not a holiday season read. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.

This snippet takes place in a flashback where heroine, Melissa, recalls the day after her boyfriend dumped her. She has been in bed all day, heartbroken. Creative editing has been used to meet the sentence limit.

I’m sprawled out in the middle of my king size bed, the side of my face planted on my pillow as I stare at the picture of me and Mom. I haven’t taken my eyes off it for an hour. What I wouldn’t give to have her here right now so she can hold me. “What am I gonna do, Mom?” I whimper with hundreds of memory bubbles bursting at once in my head. They fuel the pain that’s been crushing my heart. Every passionate moment I spent with him over three years is gone. Just gone, and I can never get it back.
My blankets and sheets are twisted like I haven’t left my bed for days as I dig my fingers into the pillow case. Actually, I haven’t left this bed at all except for a couple of trips to the bathroom.

 

Normally, my snippets include dialogue, but I thought a little narrative description would be nice. I consider myself weak in this area, so your feedback will be very helpful!

Anyway, poor Melissa! Her breakup with her boyfriend is important to the story as it plunges her into a rough situation later in the story. More from this scene next week, I hope!

In other news, I have officially decided that I’m going to leave Poland after contract finishes. I like it here, but not enough to stay another year. I’m not sure where I will end up, but I would like some more adventure abroad. Living abroad, for me, the best experience anyone can get – if they are fortunate enough to have it of course!

Thanks for your comments!

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Ashley’s New Boyfriend

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Happy Easter! The weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the links for participation guidelines, as well as the official list of participating authors.

Guess who’s back? I’m so glad to be participating after my longest absence ever! I’m offering an excerpt from my new WIP, Do for Love (formerly Cruel Summer), which is a coming-of-age YA contemporary that takes place in Cincinnati.

In this snippet, Melissa and Ashley are eating breakfast when their dad asks to meet Ashley’s new boyfriend, Logan.

This is Melissa’s POV and creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit:

Ashley looks at Dad with surprise as he goes on about how Logan’s parents are likely curious to meet her. The funny thing is, she hasn’t mentioned one word about them yet.

The pink in her cheeks vanishes instantly, replaced by milky paleness. She tucks her legs under her, sitting cross-legged in the chair and blinking rapidly at Dad, while twirling her hair with one finger. A piece of black fabric from her slippers falls off the bottom of her right foot and tumbles to the floor, as she rubs her toes.

I’m not sure why she’s nervous about Dad wanting to meet Logan, especially since she’s been dating him for almost two weeks. Dad insisted on meeting Chris after only a week. If he knew about the pics of her and Logan making out on Facebook, Instagram and Snapchat, he’d surely have wanted to meet him sooner.

“This is your first boyfriend, honeycake,” Dad says soothingly, “I simply want to meet the special boy in my little princess’s life.”

Since when is she his little princess? I’m the eldest, why can’t I be his princess?

 

Blurb: When her younger sister starts dating a young man with a dark side, life turns upside down for Melissa. She’ll need the help from the last person she would go to – her ex-boyfriend.

Well I think Melissa is entitled to being the little princess. FYI, Chris is Melissa’s ex, who will play an important role in the story. Thoughts and feedback are much appreciated!

I’m so sorry I’ve been away for all this time! The new life, which I embarked on last September, has not been as kind to me as I was hoping, and as a result kept me from participating and writing in general. However, I will soon embark on a new chapter, one of which I have been dreaming about for many years. Details of that will come at a time of my choosing. I hope you are all well! Life has not been the same without the magic of W.W.W.

Thanks for visiting me today, and I look forward to reading your lovely snippets!

Frank

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