Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. You can also find me in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! And thanks to everyone for your constructive feedback last week! I’ve incorporated your suggestions in the draft.
I’m continuing from my WIP, Driving Me Wild. Last week, Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car for the day. The snippet skips a few lines where they continue arguing and begins with her dad making his case. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:
“I will say this one last time, Melissa, when a sufficient period of time has passed, we shall discuss the possibility of you using my car again. A sufficient period of time has not passed, and therefore you are prohibited from driving the car, is that understood?”
I wince with an overload of coffee-fumed breath attacking my nostrils. “Is there, like, any chance this sufficient period of time will pass before the Bengals win another Super Bowl?”
He presses his balled fists into his hips, and I swallow hard with the fire in his eyes burning into mine. Guess the Bengals pun is a little too much. “It will pass when I say so, Melissa Lauren Isabel.”
“C’mon, Dad, just let me drive it for, like, this one day. Do it for me, I won’t ask for any-”
“I wouldn’t do it for the state governor!”
Well…looks like Dad has made his point. You lose, Melissa. Dad and her butt heads quite a bit in the story.
Anyway, comments and feedback are most appreciated. Next time, we will focus on a different chapter.
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