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Weekend Writing Warriors – Surprise Attack?

Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors Happy holidays everyone, or Wesołych Świat as they say here in Poland!

I’m very happy I finally found some time to participate today after all these months. I’m sharing a snippet from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Unfortunately, it’s not a holiday season read. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.

This snippet comes from the beginning of a new chapter, where my heroine, Melissa, comes home late one evening. She suddenly realizes her younger sister, Ashley, is home and thinks she’s going to jump out of nowhere and scare her (which she likes to do). And since their dad is out for the evening, Melissa doesn’t have anyone to help her. She sneaks through the living room, hoping to avoid a surprise attack. Creative editing has been used to meet the sentence limit.

         I tiptoe through the hall, keeping away from the hall closet, my eyes on searchlight mode for any signs of my sister lurking as I pass the dining room on my left. My heart goes wild and muscles tense in the process as I near the living room couch. The motor of the fridge hums peacefully in the kitchen, punctuating the uncomfortable silence.

         “Dad? Mel?” Ashley’s voice startles me as it sails from upstairs. “Is that you?”
          “Thank God,” I let out a sigh, “she can’t spook me.”

           It suddenly hits me I had nothing to worry about in the first place, since Ashley never leaves her room if she’s home by herself. For some reason, solitude in an empty house big enough for a family of five freaks her out, and the company of Troye Sivan and Taylor Swift posters, as well as blue décor and Spotify keep her from going insane until one of us comes home. She’s also got Mr. Whiffles, her stuffed teddy bear that our late mother gave to her when she was two, as a backup.

There isn’t a lot of action, but the reader learns a bit about Ashley. At least, there was no surprise attack.

Your feedback is most welcome and appreciated! Thanks for visiting my blog today, and be sure to visit other participating authors as well!

This will be my last participation on W.W.W. for 2018, as next week is my last week of teaching before the holidays. I’m off to Egypt next weekend to marvel at the pyramids and ancient temples during my break! Veronica Scott, you will likely be interested to hear this! I’ve always wanted to see Egypt as I’ve been fascinated with Ancient Egypt forever!

To my fellow author friends: I’ve been doing very well over the last few months, enjoying life in Poland, though the job can be very busy and stressful at times, hence why I haven’t participated. I take things one day at a time. All and all, it has been a great life-changing experience!

Happy Holidays everyone and Happy New Year! See you in 2019! Do widzenia!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – What Was That?

The weekly writing blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for participation guidelines, and to see who else is participating today.

I’m sharing an excerpt from Never Let Go, which picks up from the last snippet from two weeks ago. Teen sisters, Melissa and Ashley, are trapped in a strange room where Emily and her daughters are watching them through a skylight. The last snippet finished with Emily threatening to hurt Melissa, which sends her into a state of fright. This snippet opens with her younger sister, Ashley, speaking:

 

            “Don’t listen to her, Mel, she’s bluffin’, she’s just tryin’ to scare us!”
            I turned to her as I rubbed the goosebumps dancing on my arms. “I-I d-d-don’t think she is.”     

             “Bluffing am I? Oh little Ashley McNamara, you are very much like your father,” Emily said, casting a freaky smile on my baby sister.

            “Go to hell lady, just shut up and let us outta here, or I’ll co-”

             “Hush up impetuous teenager and dance!” Emily leaned over the edge of the skylight, disappearing from sight, and loud ‘click-click’ sounded from above, making my heart jump.

              Emily reappeared, as she and her daughters smiled at us like the witch from The Wizard of Oz.

               I dipped my chin to the floor under feet, my eyes instantly bulged as it began to glow red.

 

Uh oh! The floor is glowing red! Many of you likely know what’s coming next, but don’t spoil it for those that are new to this story. I’ve edited this scene, and I’m looking for helpful critiquing. More to follow next week.

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – It Will Be Quite Painful

The 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks for visiting my blog today! And ‘howdy!’ to all of my fellow writer friends! I’ve missed you all! Though, I guess I’ve been saying that a lot this year.

I’m offering an excerpt from my YA contemporary, Never Let Go. My MC’s Melissa and Ashley (a pair of teenage sisters) have found themselves trapped in a steel walled box room. They are greeted by woman and her two young adult daughters, who are watching them through a skylight. The woman, Emily, tells Melissa and Ashley that she intends to seek vengeance on the girls’ father whom wrong her awhile. Melissa wants to know why, of course.

The snippet, which has been formatted to meet the sentence requirement, opens with Emily speaking to Melissa. This is in Melissa’s POV.

“Because it’s better to attack a man’s heart, my dear, the ones he cares about the most…like his two daughters.”

I let out a gasp, and an uncomfortable feeling suddenly seared in my stomach.

“What a shame,” Emily said with a drowsy voice as she leaned forward to the point where her nose was almost touching the glass. “Such beautiful, healthy girls Kevin has…and now I have to do this to them.”

It became instantly clear that Emily wasn’t just imprisoning us. I swallowed the iron lump in my throat while tremors rumbled in my hands, racing throughout my bloodstream.

“Wh-what are you g-gonna do to us?”

“Oh but that would ruin the surprise, my sweet little Melissa. But don’t worry, it will be quite painful, I assure you.”

My eyes instantly grew wide and traveled across every inch of the seemingly empty room, while chills shot up and down my spine.

 

Some of you will recall previous snippets from this story, hence you know Emily isn’t joking about it being painful – and it will be indeed! Either way, what a scary situation for the hapless teens. More from this in the next edition of Weekend Writing Warriors. Your feedback is much appreciated!

I will be out of town next weekend, so the next posting will occur the weekend after. I hope to become a regular participant after what’s been my longest absence. I was just following up with that big decision I told you about. I finally made it, which meant I decided not to pursue a PhD. and return home to southern Ontario Canada. I’m glad I made this choice, even though it was one of the biggest ones I had to make. I’ll post a story about it on my blog soon.

Thanks for reading, and be sure to click on the link to Weekend Writing Warriors to read other snippets from fine authors.

Frank

 

 

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