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Weekend Writing Warriors – Please, Dad?

Welcome to the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. You can also find me in Facebook’s Snippet Sunday. Thanks for visiting my blog! And thanks to everyone for your constructive feedback last week! I’ve incorporated your suggestions in the draft.

I’m continuing from my WIP, Driving Me Wild.  Last week, Melissa asked her dad if she could borrow his car for the day. The snippet skips a few lines where they continue arguing and begins with her dad making his case. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit. Enjoy:

 

“I will say this one last time, Melissa, when a sufficient period of time has passed, we shall discuss the possibility of you using my car again. A sufficient period of time has not passed, and therefore you are prohibited from driving the car, is that understood?”

I wince with an overload of coffee-fumed breath attacking my nostrils. “Is there, like, any chance this sufficient period of time will pass before the Bengals win another Super Bowl?”

He presses his balled fists into his hips, and I swallow hard with the fire in his eyes burning into mine. Guess the Bengals pun is a little too much. “It will pass when I say so, Melissa Lauren Isabel.”

“C’mon, Dad, just let me drive it for, like, this one day. Do it for me, I won’t ask for any-”
 “I wouldn’t do it for the state governor!”

 

 

Well…looks like Dad has made his point. You lose, Melissa. Dad and her butt heads quite a bit in the story.

Anyway, comments and feedback are most appreciated. Next time, we will focus on a different chapter.

Wishing everyone good health, and most of all happiness and solidarity during this very difficult and uncertain time. Need some inspiration on beating COVID-19 lockdown? Check out my post, which comes out tomorrow morning!

 

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Sibling Revenge!

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Hello and Dzien dobry! as they say in here in Poland! Thanks for visiting my blog. The weekly blog hop is hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link for participating guidelines and the official list of Writing Warriors.

I present an excerpt from Love Conquers, my YA WIP. This snippet picks up several lines from the previous one. Having been summoned to the kitchen by her dad, Melissa walks and lets her sister have it for sneaking into her room and teasing her. It’s what she did in the last snippet I shared. Creative punctuation has been used to fit the 10-sentence limit, and is in Melissa’s POV:

Ashley and my dad turn to me as I enter the kitchen. Ashley is perched on the kitchen island, swinging her legs, and thumbs working away on her smartphone. 

I slam a balled fist into her arm as I pass her as she flashes me a smug-filled smile.

“Ow, what the fuck was that for?!”

“Melissa, what on earth has gotten into you?” Dad demands, jerking his coffee mug.

“She snuck into my room while I was sleepin’ scared the shit outta me,” I protest, pointing to the cause of my morning misery. “That’s the third time this week! Tell her to stop!”

His eyes shoot over to my little sister. “Ashley, did you tease your sister, again?”

Typical sibling rivalry! For those of you who’ve been in Dad’s situation, you can appreciate and understand! Your thoughts and feedback are most welcome! I’m visiting a mutual friend in Warsaw today, so I won’t be able to respond to comments until later.

On a personal note, I have been settling into my new life in Poland. It’s been a learning curve adjusting to a new culture, language as well as the new job! I have to admit it has been very stressful and challenging, but overall I am enjoying being abroad and glad I took this plunge. I’ve always wanted to teach abroad, and now I’m doing it!

Have a good weekend! Do widzenia!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – Dad Attacks!

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the 8-10 sentence blog hop where you sample excerpts of great stories. I’m enjoying my vacation back home in southern Ontario, though it has been a hot week here!

My excerpt today comes from Never Let Go. The last snippet left off where Melissa and her father got into an argument. In this scene, things heat up for the worst. We are in Melissa’a POV and her dad speaks first:

“We’re staying here, Melissa, rebel all you wish, but it will not change a thing…remember that.”

“And I’m going to UCLA, Dad…remember that!”

He sipped his tea as his eyes met me with total coolness. “Well I’m sure your foolish post-secondary pursuit will add to the collection of mistakes you have accumulated this year.”

“What’s that supposed to mean?” Mom challenged him.

“Puh-leeze Vanessa, the car accident, Chris, the party in which I had to come to her rescue…all because our immature firstborn would not heed the sage advice of her father.”

Hundreds of words formed on my tongue, each one eager to leap out of my mouth and sting Dad.

My mother and sister glowered at Dad as he locked eyes with me and slurped his tea.“You know now that I think of it, I begin to wonder if your immaturity is the real reason your so-called boyfriend resorted to infidelity.”

 

Well Dad’s gone too far, and Melissa won’t stand for it. Find out in the next snippet what she does. Comments are most welcome and appreciated. Have a great weekend!

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