Posts Tagged With: tickle

Weekend Writing Warriors – Get Outta Bed!

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This is the weekly 8-10 sentence blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Click on the link to visit other participating writers. Thanks for visiting my blog! I’m glad I can be sharing in the Sunday Snippet magic. I hope spring has arrived early in your parts.
I’m continuing from my YA WIP, Love Conquers. Full blurb can be found by clicking the Love Conquers page on my blog.
This snippet takes place in a flashback where heroine, Melissa, recalls the day after her boyfriend dumped her. Melissa’s sister, Ashley wants her to get out of bed and threatens to tickle her if she doesn’t. POV is Melissa’s. Ashley is the first to speak. Creative punctuation has been used to meet the sentence limit rule.

“Okay, I wantcha to, like, pick something you and I can do cuz I’m all yours for the rest of the day. Seriously, anything you want, money’s no object. Buuut, it can be lying in bed or binge-watching Netflix on the couch, so get your ass outta bed and make a choice!”

“And if I refuse?”

“I’ll tickle your feet for hours and hours.”

My eyes bulge as I gasp sit up and scoot my feet away from her. “Noooo, not that, okay you win!”

Ashley lips frame a playful evil grin as she wiggles her fingers. I hate having my feet tickled, and I know she’ll tickle mine until I literally pass out, so I’ve got no choice but to give in. I don’t even know how I let Chris tickle me every time we chilled at each other’s homes.

 

 

That should get Melissa out of bed! This is the last snippet I will share from this scene. On to a different one the next time I participate. Comments are most welcome and appreciated!

Well, my trip to Budapest and Zagreb was great! Another two countries crossed off my travel bucket list! Another six weeks and my teaching for the year will be officially over. I’ve enjoyed the experience being abroad but I’m looking forward to returning home to see family and friends.

Happy Sunday!

Frank

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Bratty Little Sis

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Summer is practically around the corner. For a taste of stories from diverse writers, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. I’m continuing with The Burning Night. Apologies to those that are eager for more from Let Go, but I really want to keep going with this story.

In this excerpt, Ashley stops tickling Melissa. Ashley shows off how she loves “tormenting” her sister, and Melissa isn’t happy. This snippet has been modified to meet the new 8-10 sentence rule.

I could feel my cheeks flush as I tried to catch my breath. A sharp pain in my ribs followed, and I put one hand over my ribcage.

With a thrust-out chest, Ashley looked at me with one of those ‘gotcha’ expressions. “I, like, never get tired of that!”

“You little brat,” I glared at her, pushing my hair away from my face. That’s the problem with siblings – they know all your weaknesses. She revealed them to all my friends through Facebook, including my big fear of spiders. She even blabbed about my ticklish feet to Chris the first time I brought him home, and he took full advantage of it throughout our whole relationship.

Ashley shrugged with a smirk like the whole thing was no biggie, and every muscle started tensing in body.

I think Ashley’s gone too far, and it looks like we’re gonna see a cat-fight. Because Melissa will be going away to college, Ashley teases her as much as she can until then. That’s the way she is, but she really loves her sister and looks up to her as an idol. How she deals with her sister going away is actually a subplot to the story. Chris is Melissa’s ex-boyfriend, who cheated on her a week before the story begins. Makes you want to care for her more, huh? I’d love to hear your thoughts.

I’d like to wish a happy belated birthday to one of our Weekend Writing Warriors moderators – happy birthday Millie Burns! Thanks for everything that you do!

Happy Sunday everyone!

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Weekend Writing Warriors/#8Sunday – More Tickling!

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For a sampling of snippets from many fine authors, head over to Weekend Writing Warriors. I remembered to sign up this time. Happy Mother’s Day to everyone and I hope you get plenty of fawning from loved ones! I’d like to send a shout-out to my own mother, who truly has the endurance of a fighter. She’s taught me never to give up and not to “play ball” with those that are up to no good.

I’m continuing to share a snippet from The Burning Night.

This picks up from the last eight where Ashley has pinned her sister, Melissa, down on her bed and is tickling her feet. Melissa’s feet are extremely ticklish. Ashley takes full pleasure in making her sister suffer, and naturally doesn’t give in to her pleas. This is Melissa’s POV and she speaks first. The snippet is in the new 8-10 sentence rule.

“S-s-stop you du-dumbass, it-it’s pure torture!”

Ashley’s fingers were like the bristles of a spinning power brush. I tried to punch her, but the tickling jolted every nerve in my body like an electric shock. She laughed as she tickled one foot then the other, sending me into another storm of squealing and laughter. Then her fingers hit the most ticklish spots – the area just below the balls of my feet.

“A-ashley, s-seriously! I-I-I’m gonna pa-pass out!”

I pounded the comforter repeatedly, hoping she’d take that as my way of saying, “Uncle”. My ribs started to ache from constant squirming and uncontrollable laughing.

Oh that Ashley. Poor Melissa. How much more can she take? This is nothing compared to what happens to her feet later in the story (wink, wink). This shows the relationship between the sisters, and I think it’s kinda cute. I look forward to reading your snippets today.

I needed some advice, if any of you have expertise on this. I want to self publish a poetry collection, but I’m not sure if I should have them professionally edited. Any thoughts on this?

Have a great Sunday!

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