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Can Melissa break the pipe? – Weekend Writing Warriors

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors  and Snippet Sunday . The rules are simple: 8 sentences, no more, no less. Post them to your website by Sunday morning and enjoy the fun.

I’m sharing a final snippet from my short story. Melissa and Ashley have been enduring what seems like an everlasting hot foot. Melissa spots a plastic pipe as she desperately tries to break it open, knowing her feet will be severely burned if she doesn’t. Ashley watches hoping water spews out as she continues to dance. Their captors above watch them – only they know the truth about the pipe. Can this save the girls?

 On with the eight:

Yanking harder on the pipe, my feet screamed from agonizing pain as I pressed them against the wall. The nauseating smell of the egg overcooking on the floor, and Ashley’s constant ouches made my head spin.

“C’mon Mel, my feet can’t take anymore of this!”

Feeling my eyes welling up with tears, I kept pulling with every aching muscle in my arms. I could no longer watch my baby sister suffer, while endlessly lifting up one foot after the other. Just as the pipe began to crack, a gust of white gas blew at me from the wall. I hacked at the blast and inhaled the fumes, which began to make me feel light-headed. My eyes got heavy as my grip on the pipe loosened.

I know you must be thinking it’s over for them. The story ends on a positive note, but because this is unpublished I can’t tell you how it ends. Your comments are most welcome and I thank you for your feedback while I’ve been sharing this story.

Next weekend, I will be attending a work-related conference in Mexico City, so I won’t be participating in next week’s session. I plan to be absent from the snippet memes until December, due to increased work commitments – I find I can only write on weekends. I will miss you all until then and appreciate your understanding.

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Weekend Writing Warriors – Melissa and Ashley spot a life-saver

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Welcome to another day of Weekend Writing Warriors . The rules are simple: post 8 sentences from any work onto your blog before Sunday morning, and comment on other writers.

Continuing from last week’s eight, Melissa has just spotted something that might save her and her sister from having their feet severely burned. See if your guesses match. If this is your first visit to my snippets, previous 8’s can be found here:

Snippet # 1

Snippet # 2

Here’s the eight:

“Look, a water pipe!” I cried to Ashley, while pointing at a green pipe running along the wall. She turned to it and gasped, before shouting, “Like how are we gonna get it open?”

As I focused on the metallic exterior of the pipe, I glimpsed at my bare hands. Given we had no other choice, I had to try – my high school basketball coach always told me I’d never know unless I tried.

“I can get it open,” I yelled, as I jumped towards the pipe and grabbed hold of it with both hands, yanking it with every ounce of strength in my muscles. With her jaw dropped, Ashley traded horrific looks between the pipe and the stove burner red below as she continued to ‘dance’.  Pulling harder, I pictured icy, cool water spewing onto this giant frying pan and soothing my poor feet, as I strained my face. Ashley let out a deafening cry, and I heard a roar of taunting laughter from above. 

Seems impossible, no? If you’re wondering why they didn’t grab onto the pipe in the first place, that wouldn’t have worked. They didn’t notice before, and besides they could only hang on for so long. Sorry to keep you all hanging, but I can only fit in so much in eight sentences. Next week will be the last snippet I share from this story. Anymore after that, and I’ll be giving the whole plot away. Remember, this is unpublished and unedited. As always, I love your comments/suggestions.

Click on the link above for the complete list of participating authors. If you are new to Weekend Writing Warriors, I suggest you visit some of my favorite writers: Sarah Ballance, Monica Enderle Pierce, Veronica Scott, Chip Etier, Sarah Cass, Caitlin Stern and Linda Hamonou. Have a great weekend! I’m also participating on Facebook’s Snippet Sunday.

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The Ultimate Hot Foot – Weekend Writing Warriors

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Welcome to another round of Weekend Writing Warriors  and Snippet Sunday.  Thank you to everyone who commented on my last 8. I’m continuing to share snippets from my new adult horror short story, Barbecued. This eight picks up my last eight.

Set-up: Teenage sisters, Ashley and Melissa, are trapped in a steel-walled room. The floor has just turned red-hot and they are forced to endure the ultimate hot foot, since there is nothing for them to grab onto. Their captor, Emily, watches them dance through a skylight in the ceiling.

Here’s the eight:

I winced and cried out, my eyes widening at the sight of my feet slapping against the red-hot surface. Mocking squeals from above pierced me like darts, as I lifted my head to see a smirk across Emily’s face. “Look at you two pathetic weaklings dance!”

“You…sick bitch, we didn’t do anything to you!”

The ear-splitting cries of agony from Ashley took my attention away from Emily, as I turned to see my poor little sister leaping uncontrollably. Her rasping breaths and tense face made my heart crack and the color drain from my face. I felt sick to my stomach watching her suffer, as the floor steadily burned the bottoms of her feet. She turned to me with frantic eyes and shouted, “Wh-what are we gonna do?!?”

Tough question. Next week, we will see if the girls can find some way out. I will share two more snippets from this story, before I go back to sharing 8s from my novel. If you aren’t too freaked out, I invite you to comment. Many thanks for taking the time to read my 8 and for your comments. I’ll do my best to read your eight today. Click on the link above for the official list of participating authors. Have a wonderful weekend!

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